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God's Wonder

by ForeverRebel

music, by far

is the best thing God's given us.

whether it's the clang of a cymbal


the chirp of a singsong voice.

music is


it brings joy to people

all over the world.

there's just something about that

pretty piano playing playfully

that nobody can resist.

music is


there's something about music that

goes straight to a person's soul.

it wraps around the soul, enticing it

to rejoice & let go.

music is


And the wonderful-est being of all is the mastermind behind it.

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Tue Nov 19, 2013 4:58 am
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dbrick wrote a review...

Hey, another good poem! It communicated how you felt about music well and you used good imagery. The verses were a little random (in terms of structure and where the words were placed on the page) and "pretty piano playing playfully" was somewhat repetitive. Other than those little thingsm it was a good poem and I really enjoyed it.

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Sun Jul 28, 2013 10:45 pm
arianaSarroyo wrote a review...

This is sweet. It's short, simple and leaves the reader feeling satisfied. I liked how you evoked strong imagery here. There were a few things I found unnecessary, though. There weren't really any stanzas, and on top of that you had the word "OR" completely capitalized. In addition, while interesting, the layout seemed to be kind of all over the place-as if there was no method to organizing it. But other than that, I have no further criticism, content wise. My only suggestion to you is not completely changing the layout but perhaps alternating it a bit. Other than that you've done well.

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Sun Jul 28, 2013 1:26 am
Killyouwithwords wrote a review...

Wow, this touched me deeply, as I am very religious and love music that makes me love my Heavenly Father even more. Wonderfully done, and very sincere. But unfortunately this is a review and I must comment on the formatting, while it was eye catching it was also confusing. Especially the last few lines, which did not follow the rest of the poem in length and format. Overall great job though!! Keep writing!

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Tue Jul 09, 2013 9:19 pm
Smilykid wrote a review...

This poem has a great message and down-to-earth feel. I like your simple diction (choice of words) and especially the way the poem is just laid out. Honestly, I don't really have much criticism to give. I would just say that you seem to be very good at poetry and should continue to write this kind of stuff. Great job!

ForeverRebel says...

Thanks for taking a look at my poem. :) It means a lot to me. I really haven't had much experience with poetry, so I'm glad that you enjoyed it.

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Tue Jul 09, 2013 7:44 pm
rishabh says...

hey pal!

[is the best thing God's given us.]

your 2nd line of first stanza has one error: instead of 'god's' use 'god' , it will give better look to ur poem.

ForeverRebel says...

Hi there. Thanks for looking at my poem. :) It wouldn't necessarily make sense if I said "is the best thing God given us". Do you think I should make the contraction "God's" "God has"?

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Tue Jul 09, 2013 7:27 pm
GodsGirl14 wrote a review...

Absolutely LOVED the message. The idea is perfect! I also loved the word choice: joy, rejoice, enticing, clang. You got a little repetitive however, "piano playing playfully?" Didn't like the sound of that. And how you used soul twice back to back,
"straight to a person's soul.
it wraps around the soul"
Punctuation could be a little better too, I can tell you weren't really paying attention to that. Last the look of the poem makes it hard to read. I don't know if it was on purpose or not, but the staircase looking poem makes it look unprofessional, and hard to read. This poem gave me a happy feeling and made me what to listen to some music though. It made me realize how much I appreciate it. Thanks for this poem. It's WONDERFUL! :D

ForeverRebel says...

Thank you. I was using alliteration on the phrase "pretty piano playing playfully". I wanted the poem to look a little unique, so that's why I did the "staircase" feel. That's also how I wrote it. XD

"You, who have all the passion for life that I have not? You, who can love and hate with a violence impossible to me? Why you are as elemental as fire and wind and wild things..."
— Gone With the Wind