Young Writers Society

Hey, another good poem! It communicated how you felt about music well and you used good imagery. The verses were a little random (in terms of structure and where the words were placed on the page) and "pretty piano playing playfully" was somewhat repetitive. Other than those little thingsm it was a good poem and I really enjoyed it.

This is sweet. It's short, simple and leaves the reader feeling satisfied. I liked how you evoked strong imagery here. There were a few things I found unnecessary, though. There weren't really any stanzas, and on top of that you had the word "OR" completely capitalized. In addition, while interesting, the layout seemed to be kind of all over the place-as if there was no method to organizing it. But other than that, I have no further criticism, content wise. My only suggestion to you is not completely changing the layout but perhaps alternating it a bit. Other than that you've done well.

Wow, this touched me deeply, as I am very religious and love music that makes me love my Heavenly Father even more. Wonderfully done, and very sincere. But unfortunately this is a review and I must comment on the formatting, while it was eye catching it was also confusing. Especially the last few lines, which did not follow the rest of the poem in length and format. Overall great job though!! Keep writing!

This poem has a great message and down-to-earth feel. I like your simple diction (choice of words) and especially the way the poem is just laid out. Honestly, I don't really have much criticism to give. I would just say that you seem to be very good at poetry and should continue to write this kind of stuff. Great job!

hey pal!

[is the best thing God's given us.]

your 2nd line of first stanza has one error: instead of 'god's' use 'god' , it will give better look to ur poem.

Absolutely LOVED the message. The idea is perfect! I also loved the word choice: joy, rejoice, enticing, clang. You got a little repetitive however, "piano playing playfully?" Didn't like the sound of that. And how you used soul twice back to back,
"straight to a person's soul.
it wraps around the soul"
Punctuation could be a little better too, I can tell you weren't really paying attention to that. Last the look of the poem makes it hard to read. I don't know if it was on purpose or not, but the staircase looking poem makes it look unprofessional, and hard to read. This poem gave me a happy feeling and made me what to listen to some music though. It made me realize how much I appreciate it. Thanks for this poem. It's WONDERFUL!