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  • Poetry » Spiritual, General
    Re: God's Wonder

    This poem has a great message and down-to-earth feel. I like your simple diction (choice of words) and especially the way the poem is just laid out. Honestly, I don't ...

    Jul 9, 2013

  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General
    Re: Sanctuary of Discord--Prologue

    Fantasy is my favorite genre, so I'm always excited when I see a post under it. Your writing style is very fluid and descriptive. I also like the names. I ...

    Jul 9, 2013

  • Poetry » General, General
    Re: Deleted

    I like how personal this is. You know very well what you are talking about here and it shows. I agree with pandabear7 that the poem being free-verse is a ...

    Jul 8, 2013

  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Mystery / Suspense
    Re: Highway To Inferno: Chapter Two

    Having read part one, I think is a good follow-up chapter. I like how you introduce the other side to the story. I really have nothing bad to say about ...

    Jun 30, 2013

  • Novel / Chapter » Mystery / Suspense, General
    Re: Highway To Inferno (Chapter One)

    You have the start to a good story here, it's interesting. It is a bit rough in places in terms of grammar, but a quick read-through can easily fix these ...

    Jun 30, 2013

  • Novel / Chapter » Fanfiction, Romantic
    Re: Parallel

    As a fan of Percy Jackson, I was pretty eager to read this. Fanfictions are hard for me because I have trouble fully grasping the scope of the characters and ...

    Jun 29, 2013

  • Novel / Chapter » Historical Fiction, Culture
    Re: Israel, Chapter 2

    Ah, I adore this story. It truly is a gem. The window you provide into this period of time is unprecedented. I'm growing very attached to the main character and ...

    Jun 29, 2013

  • Article / Essay » Humor, Satire
    Re: Being "That Kid": How NOT to be a Massive D-Bag

    Haha! This is hilarious, mostly because it's true! If you go to high school you find these people ALL the time. They are absolutely obnoxious and no one wants to ...

    Jun 29, 2013

  • Poetry » Narrative, General
    Re: Rewind

    Congrats on joining YWS! I have mixed feelings about this poem. While I certainly don't think it's bad, I feel like the rhyme scheme really limits where it can go. ...

    Jun 28, 2013

  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Mystery / Suspense
    Re: Pouring Shadows (Chapter 1)

    This is the great start to a story. You instill a sense of mystery here that makes me want the next part of the story. I really like the beginning, ...

    Jun 27, 2013

  • Novel / Chapter » Historical Fiction, Culture
    Re: Israel, Chapter 1

    Wow, this is absolutely fantastic. Your writing style is so fluid and descriptive, I was blown away. As a fan of historical fiction (I'm writing one myself now) I know ...

    Jun 27, 2013

  • Poetry » Fantasy, Fantasy
    Re: The Laughing Shadow

    I like this poem and its quirkiness. It makes the laughing shadow look playful and mischievous rather than a malevolent thing. The poem, in terms of content, is kind of ...

    Jun 27, 2013

  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Science Fiction
    Re: The League Chapter One

    Hello! Welcome to YWS! I think you have the beginnings to a great story here. You set up the atmosphere pretty well, and I love the irony in the scene. ...

    Jun 27, 2013

  • Poetry » Romantic, Lyrical
    Re: To The One I Love(d) | Edited

    Wow! Congrats on getting a review from our prestigious founder! I really like this poem, especially what it stands for. I agree with Nate that the one thing dragging this ...

    Jun 27, 2013

  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Science Fiction
    Re: The Heart Button 2: Part One

    Hello! Let me just say that I really like what you have here. Your writing style is very fluid and leaves nothing to be desired. I like the world you've ...

    Jun 27, 2013

You are all the colours in one, at full brightness.
— Jennifer Niven, 'All the Bright Places'