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Re: I miss the birds in winter (revised)
Hey Blue, A very beautifully written poem that describes in such a lucid way in which the writer misses the songs of the birds in winter. You have given a ...
Jul 10, 2019 -
Re: Small Treasons
You are a very talented poem and have a way with words that I wish I could even slightly match. I also absolutely love your word choice using words like ...
Jan 2, 2017 -
Re: your great might
Oh and what's this mean 'forgotten end to end' that seems like a forced attempt at rhyming. It makes no logical sense. It's probably where this falls down, the rhyming, ...
Dec 29, 2016 -
Re: Whole Face Genocide
cannot see the meaning in this either. To be honest with you I didn't like it, I felt it was just there and I think you concerntrated more on putting ...
Dec 29, 2016 -
Re: The Water Cycle (it's why life is so sad nowadays)
Hey! I think this poem is very interesting and I like the concept a lot. It flows quite well and the rhyming is good, if a little predictable in places. ...
Dec 29, 2016 -
Re: The Dark Tower by Stephen King
Hey, this is really really well written! Well done. You have a similar writing style to me; tending to use a larger vocabulary. And I've received so many requests to ...
Dec 29, 2016 -
Re: Nikolina
Corrections ~ “What are those?” I asked pointing forward; Rick held his hand up as one of the puffballs slowed down and laid right in his hand. C: "What are ...
Dec 29, 2016 -
Re: What Even Bro
Wow, I loved that, and I am not really a huge fan of poems, I mean they are ok but this was more than just ok, I looked back on ...
Dec 29, 2016 -
Re: Hanging Tree's Lament
I really really love your style with this. The flow, rhyming, wording are in a word: fantastic. I can hear you saying this from deep inside, like writing your innermost ...
Dec 29, 2016 -
Re: The Third Son - Chapter Six of Shattered Crowns
It's beautifully written, carry on .I did see a couple of typos, but nothing that hindered your message. A few words here and there might be tweaked, but overall it's ...
Dec 29, 2016 -
Re: Rickety Ranch Rescue Center Chp. 1
Hello! Sid here for a review! Also, welcome to YWS! I hope your time here will be enjoyable, and I'm also glad that I get to be your first review! ...
Aug 3, 2016 -
Re: Confessions from Depression: A Memoir
Wonderful poem!! The thing about this poem that I would like to see adjusted most would be its structure. You could split up some of your longer lines to make ...
Aug 3, 2016 -
Re: The Beauty of Lies - Part II
Wow, that is some good expression. Personally I like the way you used less words, but still be able to convey the emotion. {cons} there's no punctuation, and it's a ...
Aug 3, 2016 -
Re: Money : A Mystery
I'll start with what I liked about this. The first paragraph really caught my attention and I was immediately interested in what the "Darkness" was. The words you used to ...
Aug 1, 2016 -
Re: Don't Fall In Love
Okay, this is a interesting paragraph, and I have a few complaints. For one, it appears you have inconsistent periods, in poetry unless you are doing a certain style, you ...
Jul 20, 2016
