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The idea was good and nice,but if you are trying to bring rythm into this poem,like you started off well with the first two lines,and then again in the second ...

In totallity I would say it was good. Though I would have liked some rythm into this poem. And yes the preface or the real picture is visible, I liked ...

Awww....this was so sweet and cute....this has been one of mine favourite games since childhhood.I liked it a lot,well done buddy!! :)

Hey Azure!!This is the first time I am reading your work....and I liked it.The starting was good,and the descriptions in short was good.A nice small poem. Keep writing and posting,as ...

This poem has a nice description.I liked it. At last I am calm, stressed released from my being. Thoughts are at rest and I feel so alone. Peace at last, ...

Ah!I think that wasn't actually weird....its was actually funny and nice and yea childish too.I had fun reading it. Well done!You have the skills.....Keep writing and post them too! see ...

That was nice...I felt the first stanza was short and simple,and the second stanza was pretty vague compared to the first one. I would have liked to expand it more,but ...

I think you had something in your mind while writing this,and based on that you wrote this piece.And you didn't give a clue to the reader what are you talking ...

I think this was just totally different sought of poem.Pretty interesting. In short u tried to express a lot ,and it worked out perfectly.the idea was fabulous. Keep it up ...

I think that was had that flow and the ending was nice. But the observations in the poem were pretty hapazard,and also the rhymining was way better and at the ...

I would have liked some rythm into this poem,like ryhming and all that,but then again the poem was good so that can be spared. Well done! It was good indeed. ...

I agree to Mad. I think you had a really nice idea about this poem,but it would be better if you expand it,it doesn't have to be short.Your poem consists ...

Though this poem wasn't a master piece but it was so touchy, and it definately showed how much you love ur grandma. Try using some synonyms of love... Keep writing ...

CHarlie and the CHocolate Factory The BFG The Complete Adventures Of Charlie And MR WILLY WONKA. A Curious Event of the Dog at the Nighttime. A Series of Unfortunate Events

First of all where are the punctuations?Every line in this poetry looks to be a run on line...cuz there are no puntuations at the end of any line. Second of ...