ShadowKnight155

I was going to write a really thorough-good review, but I started it, it came out WAY too harsh for my liking, and it all really just boiled down to ...

Well, first off welcome to YWS and a great first poem. I'll probably sound really mean, but take it how you like. :) Overall I enjoyed the poem. It lacks ...

Well first off I love math and I'm a programmer so I may come off a little harsher than I like. :) Maybe I am offended. I don't know. :P ...

I'm quite disappointed, to be blunt. It has your name(style) written all over it, but it doesn't have your level of awesomeness. :( I'm just gonna quote cause it's easier, ...

Very nice. It had a deep, descriptive atmosphere. I can't really say a lot on it, though. It was short, but you can never really have a too short poem. ...

Are you saying that the pain has finally demoralized you and made you a walking corpse? As for the writing, it's a cliche, stereotypical topic. However, it's a situation too ...

I feel so bad for you. I could never imagine that happening to my dad. If I lost him in any way, it would be devastating. He's already had a ...

The periods would probably kill the flow. I advise against it. It was powerful as it is. I don't know if I completely understand it. I can relate to the ...

Stanza 3 Stanza 5 Those stanza were choppy, but they did get the point across. Other than that, powerful story. It may be a tad overdone, but I guess this ...

Personally I like it. I understand the contradiction at the end. By human nature we're all so...naive, is it?... that we come to enjoy pain and problems. We still act ...

I'm a little tired so I'll take the easy way out. QUOTES!!! Yay! Come and set me free. Learn to love forever. Let me come to you, And I will ...

Perhaps the unorganization that animekaratepup pointed out(which I for one didn't notice), could be symbolic of the nature of the subject? I like it. But, I'm still trying to figure ...

Wow, I like it. In truth, I think that your sexuality isn't important, and you should be proud of your beliefs. You should love somebody for who they are. Regardless ...

I'm greatly sickened by the attraction of women to abusive men. You hate him, but you don't leave. I believe I understand why women(ie, the MC) don't, can't leave, simply ...

“Maybe he will let you go since you’re now 16.” she said so unassumingly, obvious not knowing the wrath of my father. Which makes me think of the time I ...