The Night

by PinkPanther

Published May 9, 2011

E - Everyone

The veiled, black night creeps slowly up.
A silent panther, crouching low.
She greets the moon and stars with ease,
And shifts her gaze to city lights.

Feeble scurry, dancing mice,

She observes, but doesn't lull.

Then springs up on ready paws,

And gives way to weary sun.

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peachygirl101 wrote a review Review · May 17, 2011

I really like this poem! It is so good! I know it has most likely taken you a very long time indeed to complete and form, but hey, it's great! If there is anyone who disagrees with me then they defiantly have some strange issue that is so unknown to society. Oh well! We will tell them what's right! By the way, this poem is Amazing!

ShadowKnight155 wrote a review Review · May 15, 2011

Very nice. It had a deep, descriptive atmosphere. I can't really say a lot on it, though. It was short, but you can never really have a too short poem. Unless it was really bad and like three words. :/

And on the "I didn't put too much work into it" thing: I oughta slap you. I wanna see what your work would be like if you tried. If this isn't trying, then I'm scarred to know how awesome your trying is! Good work, and keep it up! I'd love to see more!

--Skis

CuteJackRussell wrote a review Review · May 10, 2011

Hello there,

Although this was very basic and simplistic, but I did indeed like it. My favorite stanza was the first one because it was more descriptive then the last one. I also liked it because for me it created a lot of imagery which was good. It also really told the picture for me. I would recommend adding some more description to the second stanza. It also uses good grammar and language. Generally I really liked it and I didn't really think it was short at all.

From Cute Jack Russell



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