SetSytes

Great post-apocalyptic writing. There's a lot of potential for where this can go. Unlike some other reviewers, I don't think you want to do more explanation - like who the ...

Wow, this was great. Beautiful writing and concept. I can't think of much bad to say about it. Perhaps edit it to incorporate GoldFlame's dialogue suggestions. Also I don't think ...

Really great opener horrendous, I'm impressed. The characters stand out from each other already, the dialogue is tight and fairly natural. Nothing takes you out from the story, and it's ...

This was really fantastic. Whether it be poem, riddle or even flash prose. I wouldn't know the answer to the riddle, but I think treating it as a riddle itself ...

Superb poem. It was really well crafted and a great rhyming scheme. I don't even normally like poems but I liked this one. You have some great, dark imagery in ...

I really enjoyed this piece. Great work. You have a great voice to you, a style full of simple power in hard, rough sentences. The plot was very interesting, although ...

Excellent piece. Your use of description to create a beautiful, serene and melancholic mood is superb. I particularly like: "...fog covers the mountains and the great big blue like a ...

Really great piece. It's fine that it doesn't have a strong purpose to it, I'm taking it as it is - a creative gaze on night life, a sordid little ...

If I'd reviewed this one first, I would have lambasted it with praise. Unfortunately I don't think it quite matches up with the first part. I think it's most likely ...

Excellent piece. I thoroughly enjoyed this. You have a voice very much your own, a long way from the standard voice of commercial fiction and closer to the offbeat style ...

This was a pretty enjoyable piece, you have a really good grasp of horror, unsettling and grotesque imagery. It did feel kind of rushed and you might want to work ...

Great piece. First review of yours so I'll just say that I noticed you're 17 - and thus your work seems exceptional considering. I'm sure I wasn't that good writing ...

Hate to be someone who chimes in with the general crowd but yes - paragraph breaks! Please edit this story with them. It makes it very hard to read and ...

I'm amazed you're only 15 as this is pretty great work. Certainly far better than what I or most of us were writing at that age. I think you're only ...

Hard to say I 'like' this piece, when it's just child torture, but I do. I can see a huge Marquis de Sade influence in your writing, in fact I'd ...