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Sassykat

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: It's a Lifestyle

    DUDE. This was totally unbelievable. I could totally tell exactly what you were talking about the whole time, even though you didn't come right out and say "basketball." And I've ...

    Nov 23, 2011
  • Lyrics » General, General Re: I'm gonna be alright

    This was one of those songs where I could imagine the actual music because the words had that perfect rhythm and beat that flowed perfectly, just like...well, just like music. ...

    Sep 3, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Thoughts

    I agree wholeheartedly with jkr5horses. However, I did find one small critique that I cannot call anything but a minor typo; When your staring and not blinking "Your" should be ...

    Aug 21, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Careless, Dreamy

    This was sweet. I can relate to your inspiration; I find myself wondering that same thing at times. :D I did have a few critiques for this, the biggest of ...

    Aug 21, 2011
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Here I Am

    I have read "Out of the Dust", and I think you did a very good job with this. You've captured the emotions very well...yes, i said "emotions". I sensed a ...

    Aug 18, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: heart broken

    I liked the simpleness of this poem. It made it easy on the eyes and mind :D I'll start with the boring stuff. the one I trust just lost it ...

    Aug 16, 2011
  • Other » General, General Re: Rustle Of A Wing

    Okay I'll start with the boring stuff: I had gently run my hand through your small face, studying every fold, every crease If you just look at this you can ...

    Aug 16, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: deleted

    This was an interesting read; How you portrayed standing out as a bad thing, instead of positive individuality and such. It's one that makes people think. Anyway, I had one ...

    Aug 15, 2011
  • Short Story » General, General Re: The only way (Edited)

    This was so cool. It's amazing what you can do with 150 words when you put your mind to it. I had a couple critiques, though: I did it for ...

    Jul 29, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: American Red Goes Out of Fashion

    This was amazing! It was so well thought out, I really don't have much to say to it. One thing I noticed, and it may be that I just read ...

    Jul 27, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: A girl with a song

    There is a song in this girl, A song filled with music. I really liked how you made this line: how something may have/be a song, but not necessarily be ...

    Jul 26, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: angel of fate

    Oh , A ngel of F ate I do not believe No comma That the fate you have chosen is the fate for me , For I make my own ...

    Jul 26, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Thrill, Fear, and Amusement

    An amusement ride, I presume? How true, how very, very true. I enjoyed it. I just have a few critiques to make: As we accend, riders silence and raise their ...

    Jul 24, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Acire

    The first thing I noticed, grammar-wise, is that you have missed a couple of punctuation marks. Like here: I wonder sometimes if things were different if I’d still be wrapped ...

    Jul 16, 2011
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Torn In Half

    Okay, first of all, without even reading your story, I can already tell you one thing: SPACE. IT. OUT. Nobody wants to read a story that jumps right into a ...

    Jul 14, 2011


In a dream you are never eighty.
— Anne Sexton