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Re: It's a Lifestyle
DUDE. This was totally unbelievable. I could totally tell exactly what you were talking about the whole time, even though you didn't come right out and say "basketball." And I've ...
Nov 23, 2011 -
Re: I'm gonna be alright
This was one of those songs where I could imagine the actual music because the words had that perfect rhythm and beat that flowed perfectly, just like...well, just like music. ...
Sep 3, 2011 -
Re: Thoughts
I agree wholeheartedly with jkr5horses. However, I did find one small critique that I cannot call anything but a minor typo; When your staring and not blinking "Your" should be ...
Aug 21, 2011 -
Re: Careless, Dreamy
This was sweet. I can relate to your inspiration; I find myself wondering that same thing at times. :D I did have a few critiques for this, the biggest of ...
Aug 21, 2011 -
Re: Here I Am
I have read "Out of the Dust", and I think you did a very good job with this. You've captured the emotions very well...yes, i said "emotions". I sensed a ...
Aug 18, 2011 -
Re: heart broken
I liked the simpleness of this poem. It made it easy on the eyes and mind :D I'll start with the boring stuff. the one I trust just lost it ...
Aug 16, 2011 -
Re: Rustle Of A Wing
Okay I'll start with the boring stuff: I had gently run my hand through your small face, studying every fold, every crease If you just look at this you can ...
Aug 16, 2011 -
Re: deleted
This was an interesting read; How you portrayed standing out as a bad thing, instead of positive individuality and such. It's one that makes people think. Anyway, I had one ...
Aug 15, 2011 -
Re: The only way (Edited)
This was so cool. It's amazing what you can do with 150 words when you put your mind to it. I had a couple critiques, though: I did it for ...
Jul 29, 2011 -
Re: American Red Goes Out of Fashion
This was amazing! It was so well thought out, I really don't have much to say to it. One thing I noticed, and it may be that I just read ...
Jul 27, 2011 -
Re: A girl with a song
There is a song in this girl, A song filled with music. I really liked how you made this line: how something may have/be a song, but not necessarily be ...
Jul 26, 2011 -
Re: angel of fate
Oh , A ngel of F ate I do not believe No comma That the fate you have chosen is the fate for me , For I make my own ...
Jul 26, 2011 -
Re: Thrill, Fear, and Amusement
An amusement ride, I presume? How true, how very, very true. I enjoyed it. I just have a few critiques to make: As we accend, riders silence and raise their ...
Jul 24, 2011 -
Re: Acire
The first thing I noticed, grammar-wise, is that you have missed a couple of punctuation marks. Like here: I wonder sometimes if things were different if I’d still be wrapped ...
Jul 16, 2011 -
Re: Torn In Half
Okay, first of all, without even reading your story, I can already tell you one thing: SPACE. IT. OUT. Nobody wants to read a story that jumps right into a ...
Jul 14, 2011
