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yeah, that made me laugh so hard!!! haha, I thought this was very well done though, Faith. It was part extreme gross out toward the end (note the age) but ...

lol Brad I love it but you don't have to rewrite everything i write...lol

I so agree!!! I really, really like this story. It's kind of mysterious...and...frrreaky. But it's cool anyway lol. And I love the name Bevan...have to remember that one. You have ...

It's cool. :D You have to write some more stuff in this format.

Oh that's a long story...lol COMBAT BOOTS AND ALL-STARS ROCK!!!!!

Uhm...Brad, you officially creep me out. But that's OK...I have to agree with everyone else. It was really funny. Especially the first two paragraphs...the whole sort of goth thing really ...

I was just going to say that...I loved the ye and yers. Awesomeness. It made the poem really unique. And yes it does sound like a clan of cannibals talking...

I know...wow. It certainly is nice to not have to go picking through to find errors and clunkiness...

I really thought it was very funny. Especially the part about the fifth grade girls...ha ha. A lot of the girls in my school look like that...and they do look ...

I liked the overall message you were trying to portray, except, like everyone knows, I'm not one for rhyming poetry. It's a skill most of us aren't good at. And ...

Oh i remember hekategirl telling me about that one...if too people say it's awesome, then it must be good. :D

I noticed the in thing pretty early on...thanks for stealing all possible critique, Tara! lol i seriously don't have any critique. Other than to say the lame-o usual great job ...

That's sounds like a cool book...*runs to library*

Ha ha!!! I love the line about the dancing polar bears. fun stuff... It's pretty short, but to the point, and, besides which, it's pretty good. Kinda confusing, but you ...

Hey, it's pretty good, just next time, post a litle bit more, mkay? It makes it easier to critique.