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I have no idea how long I had been walking then again I didn’t even know who I was or how I got into this desert, I knew was that if I stopped and laid down I wouldn’t get back up, so I kept walking. I walk until the sun beat on my back so heavily it felt like my skin was going to melt of my bones. Finally I fell into the white hot sand, I have no idea how long I lay there, suddenly I heard foot steps “praise the gods iv been saved” I shouted, then I looked up, and there standing in front of my was.............. death. “I see, make it a fast” I lowered my head and closed my eyes, something hit the ground, I looked up and there was a bottle of water “get up and follow me” what other choice did I have, I drank the water and followed, after all only a fool argues with death.
Well this is an interesting one. As far as first chapters go, this is not the sort of thing that you expect to see normally, because generally the protagonist is not at the point of death, or at the very least if they are, they're usually going to survive somehow, but here it seems we've got death themself coming down to get this hero here to travel to the land of death.
It definitely does a wonderful job of getting our attention though, and it also serves as a lovely bit of a cliffhanger which is the perfect way to end a first chapter, because now us readers are going to find it very difficult to not turn that page and read the next chapter just to see how this would go.
Besides that situation, the way you set up the surroundings here is also quite nice. Its not the most detailed but given the size of this piece that makes a lot of sense and despite the lack of detail it does manage to get across the vibe that it attempts to get across and does it pretty well too. You can see why this person would collapse so easily and accept death.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.