Yeah, it was very different that others. Pretty unique, and was a good fast read. The "ye, yer, and yells" were very unique. I never actually read a poem written in old english. Very good, two thumbs up.
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Do ye find yer self depraved and afraid
If so let us cut out the source of yer pain
Let us cut out the heart
If ye find us kindly
Then let us stay
And help ye in your disarray
Do ye find yer self confused and abused
If so let us suffocate the source of yer strife
Lets us suffocate the brain
If ye find us well
Then let us stay
And help ye disembowel your bane
Do ye find yer self heart and burnt
If so let us free you this day
Let us release ye from the sane
If you find us marry
Then let us stay
After all ye have everything to gain
Yeah, it was very different that others. Pretty unique, and was a good fast read. The "ye, yer, and yells" were very unique. I never actually read a poem written in old english. Very good, two thumbs up.
this is the only poem iv written with ye, yer and yell. i usally dont like to use old english but it just sound right when i put it in the poem
I was just going to say that...I loved the ye and yers. Awesomeness. It made the poem really unique.
And yes it does sound like a clan of cannibals talking...
Your piece is very..... different. is the "us" this poem keeps refering to a ton of blood thirsty cannibals or something, cause it sure seems that way... 
Anyway, this piece isn't that bad with all the 'yer' and 'ye' stuff, that actually makes it sound cool.
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