Hmm. This wasn't one of your best. Even though I know you hate sentences like that *smiles*
Especially the "were you" stanza, that didn't do it for me. Seemed so out of place...this was probably your intention, however, I don't think this is needed as the next few stanzas after this provide that purpose. Generally, the poem was fresh, I liked the enjambement style of ending with "are", "is" and "in" forcing you to read to the next line and letting it flow well. However, the end ruined it for me, and although this wans't your best,I still know you are an excellent writer and look forward to your next 'installment' (you're a regular comic book now).
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