Sam

kinda is but that's OK. :D I couldn't really find anything in here to critique...just what's with the symbols? 'Sol' wasn't exactly my favorite story, but that's OK. I'll read ...

Again, like with your other poem, forget the language. It's a great poem! I like the style...that was lame, but oh well, I can't find anything else to critique on. ...

Morran you're really good...:D I didn't find any mistakes or anything. It's just kind of wierd how they sat there for years and years...it's hard to tell if you're being ...

Interesting poem, just one suggestion- don't call it 'grief'. to put it in Incandence's words, it's like telling us 'we interrupt this program to deliver the obvious statement of the ...

I agree with Incandescence. Haikus are fun to read, but you can only agree or disagree, you can't critique. Of course you can relate, too, like with this one...:D

It's a very wierd topic, department store mannequins, but you made it work with out being overly wierd. :D You have some great points in here, about the teenager and ...

It is...*sniff* I could never write lyrics for songs. Notation, ya, but no lyrics. This is sooo different from a lot of what they put on the radio now. :D ...

Yeah...this is awesome! You guys made a big fuss about language...I must be blind because I didn't notice it! :D I have a chatroom myself, there really are moment like ...

woah! I normally don't go into the fantasy section because I don't care for the genre, but I'm sorry I didn't come in here earlier. This was great! You start ...

This is pretty long, so I can't give you all that deep critique...:D My only bit would to go over it and look for grammar mistakes- like in a coulple ...

My suggestion- pretend this is happening to you. How would you feel? I mean, a lot of kids are afraid to present their problems to a counselor or something, and ...

Yes, it is awesome...I say this to everyone, sorry, but this is really, really emotional! It's great. The only thing I'm wondering is that line about 'Just let me shed'...I ...

Yes, it's really creepy! the thing about you describing the stench of the blood and stuff...yecch, really realistic! And that creepy lady and all the decapitated dead girls in a ...

Yes, it is haunting...with the forgotten toys and and the laughter of the neighboring children or whatever. I loved it based on a true story? I feel bad for asking ...

I think you just voiced aloud what everyone thinks...that, wouldn't it be great to be a newborn? Not caring about anything, not about how you looked, not about what others ...