Sageleaf

Hey zwinky! I love to see a post about God! I have to agree with Jose, (though I will be a little less blunt) your poem does need some work. ...

Hi thewritersdream! Interesting poem, I like the ideas here but you do need to work on some things. The most obvious to me is that you need to choose a ...

Congratulations on an awesome poem! You convey your story in such a simple yet bitter-sweet way. What I love about horses is their unconditional love, and how they will steal ...

Wow! If you write this idea into a book, I would definitely read it! Very interesting plot idea so far! I don't see any grammatical errors that weren't already addressed. ...

First off, don't put yourself down! My writing teacher used to yell at me every week for saying I was bad at something. Everyone has different writing abilities, but when ...

Wow Eli, this is powerful! It makes you think about those stories in a different way, more in depth. I have to disagree with Kamas, though; I like how you ...

Aww this is so awesome! I wish more guys realised the things you say here. It sounds as if you wrote this as a song. If that is the case, ...

Hi Kaywiia! I love this idea! It's so encouraging, and I'm sure your friend will love these. My favorites are "Building a Future" and "My Goodbye". I guess the only ...

Hi Rose14 and welcome to YWS! First off, let me say this; I don't mean any offense with my review. I am just trying to help you become a better ...

I agree with RobsterJames, this would make a great song! Some people think there isn't a difference between lyrics and poetry, but there is. In order to be great (instead ...

Hi! So, you said you want it like Dr. Suess, so I'm guessing your going for a childish type feel? Also, how flexible is the narration? I mean, could you ...

Hi! Your poem does make sense, the meaning is just a little bit elusive for me. I know it's about two lovers, but I don't know if one died or ...

Wow Jessa, this is amazing. I feel like I just lost a friend too. I don't agree with those of you who want less questions. I understand that questions are ...

Hi Snowberry! This is a really interesting topic. It's love, hurt and acceptance all rolled into one, which is unique because most writers choose just one of those topics. I ...

Hi Priyansha! Let me first say, this poem is beautiful. It is strong, serious, and so sincere. I can tell that, if you could, you would read this to everyone ...