Rydia

Oooh. I love this chapter. The Night Cat's sound great. They should join the war! Lol. Just a few specific points first - Valery said reluctantly, as if not wanting ...

I loved this piece. very imaginative and your characters... uh... hangers have such great characterization. I must say I never talked to hangers as I child but I played my ...

I liked this. Some very interesting characters and a nice touch of fantasy. I love the description of K'ratcha's eyes. Very well done. Just a few specific points - Somehow ...

A few specific points to make first - She looked gorgeous, she had waited for this dance for the past three years. [I think this would be better if you ...

Wow, it's been many years since I watched pokemon and so I don't know this character or the new storyline but I found this interesting. You switch tenses a few ...

Ooooh. You have an interesting character here and I loved your descriptions. Neither too text heavy or too full of dialogue. A very good ballance. I have just the one ...

Some of the imagery in this is beautiful but I do agree that it's crammed with adverbs and adjectives. Don't get me wrong, I think they're very important to poetry ...

I certainly prefer the layout of the second and altogether, it's more poetic. The first is in sort of a prayer format and has similar language to such so yeah, ...

It was generally pretty good, just a few specific points to make - There was a time where he would hit people if he got upset. [Instead of where he ...

I'm going to agree that your beginning could be stronger but starting with the flash back might be a bit confusing. I'm not sure how you could improve that... Now ...

This was a rather simplistic prologue. Add some more description, a little characterisation and work on your sentence structure. The idea that's there is okay but what you have so ...

This isn't really poetry and you have a tense switch in the first line. It should be when I wake... Other than that, there isn't really much to critique. Order ...

Sorry but I don't like this one. Listen to Claudette when she tells you to scrap the repetition and also, the rhyme just doesn't seem to work with this style ...

I really liked this, your rhyme scheme is original and I saw the pattern practically straight away but then I've been known to experiment with many a strange structure so ...

I think I shall just do this one line to line, my initial impression of the whole thing is a bit muddled... I can't wait for tomorrow, [Not the most ...