Ronald559

I thought this was funny, but I often don't do most of these things. I do research a lot. I keep the history because I like to screw with people. ...

I loved the ship and the storm, and I think I like this one second best. I noticed in almost all your poems you talk about nature. You must really ...

I think people lie because lying makes the world keep spinning. Peace on earth depends on a delicate balance of people lying. We lie to maintain. Tell the truth for ...

I don't agree that the world should be more gender neutral. I do think we should celebrate our differences. (It's crazy because I wrote this before seeing Sir Ian Mckellan ...

It's not as if I had never met her before. We had mutual friends, we'd seen each other in the hallways. Passing "hello"'s as we walked to the next class ...

Few people were out and about doing their own business, those who were did not paying any attention or give a second glance to Christopher or Russell who were both ...

her head lifted itself Her head isn't alive and can't lift itself. [quote}So they walked in silence, side-by-side. It was like Silence was on her left side, and Elicia was ...

Lucius scuttled behind Claud, and used the older man as a personal meat shield. Do you see the difference? It flows better this way. It's because you are in the ...

Okay a couple of things before I give you some criticism. First of all it was great. You have some great description, and a clear voice for the main character/character ...

Words cannot express my love for this poem. Asking if you really wrote this is a sin, so I won't. But I honestly really love your poem. The flow of ...

"I don't know my name. I don't know where I am anymore. I don't know what time it is. I don't know where I am or how long I've talked ...

This isn't my cup of tea. And it isn't the subject matter but the prose. Which is merciless. You give so much, all at once. I can hardly take it ...

"She glances down." There was something very distracting about this line. It's weird the way it comes off. She glances down. Rather than, "she glanced down." Which goes much quicker, ...

"breaking the silence." When you write dialogue, and then say something like this. It just ruins it. Yeah, we know he breaks the silence, we saw. So why tell us ...

""What am I doing here? What is this place, Dan." I was very confused and overwhelmed."" It's a little redundant don't you think? The next phrase takes the importance away ...