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  • Poetry » Romantic, Dramatic Re: Colliding Fire With Ice

    Hello review from Romania! The first line is confusing with I'm and I right next to each other. Also remeber your periods and commas. Theres a big difference between "Let's ...

    Aug 18, 2014
  • Poetry » Realistic, General Re: Most wanted writers!

    Hello review from romania. ~ I have complete understanding with the message of this. We need better writers or at least people who try to make thier next work better ...

    Aug 18, 2014
  • Other » Narrative, Realistic Re: The Peace in this World

    Hello review time with Romania~ First in the forth paragraph you forgot the "p" in "up" and missed a 'm' in summer. Thats all i noticed during the first read, ...

    Aug 9, 2014
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Violins

    Hello review time with Romania. ~ First your rythme schme dosn't read very well because everything rythmes with head. You should know the system of A,B,C,D rythmes. Use it please. ...

    Aug 9, 2014
  • Poetry » Lyrical, Realistic Re: Restless Night

    Hello review time with Romania. ~ I can see this being a picture book with Dr. Suess illustrations. Its just the way the poems flows ands its easy read. I ...

    Aug 9, 2014
  • Poetry » Romantic, Dramatic Re: Arms

    Hello I'm here to review. First its a litttle sad its so small. The message is nice but you didnt even use correct grammar. I strongly suggest adding more lines ...

    Aug 8, 2014
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Waiting and watching

    Its review time with the best country in the world, Romania. ~ First you forgot to capitolize "what" i sentenced two, six, ten and forteen. Also the "can't" in the ...

    Aug 8, 2014
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Other Re: the steps to create an avalanche.

    Hello time for a review. I knowticed your a newbie to this site like me so hears some tips. Always write like your most ferosious english teacher is going to ...

    Aug 8, 2014
  • Poetry » Horror, Review Re: She's Just a pawn

    Hello review time with me, Romania. I am not a grammer person what I'm about to say may be complete @&%$, but dont forget your commas. Theres a huge difference ...

    Aug 8, 2014
  • Article / Essay » Other, General Re: Linkzude16's Writing Tips

    Hey stranger whats up? Review time. I think it would be easier for people to read if you bullet pointed your writing tips. Like in a powerpoint. Also the quotes ...

    Aug 8, 2014
  • Poetry » Narrative, Fantasy Re: Sun Seeker

    Its review time. ~~~ The only confusion I have is the second line: "drinking rain as some drink wine", the way the sentence is written gives a postive connotation to ...

    Aug 8, 2014
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Film Re: It came down to Star Wars, in the end.

    Its a nice short read. I realize its a memory but i noticed you have been a member for a while but try to add more complex vocabulary in order ...

    Aug 8, 2014
  • Short Story » Dramatic, Mystery / Suspense Re: Tree's Revenge

    This reminds me of the old goosebumps stories i used to read as a kid. Its very nice but if you want to improve on a higher levels of writing ...

    Aug 6, 2014
  • Poetry » Culture, General Re: Baby

    Interesting take on a mother and baby. I never really thought of mothers being slaves to their kids but it is true. I like the rythmetical reader in the work ...

    Aug 6, 2014
  • Poetry » Fantasy, Romantic Re: Teach Me How To Dance

    I dont know if its strange but i read the girls part first and then the boys. At first I was confused obviously for olny getting half of eath story ...

    Aug 6, 2014


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