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Re: Colliding Fire With Ice
Hello review from Romania! The first line is confusing with I'm and I right next to each other. Also remeber your periods and commas. Theres a big difference between "Let's ...
Aug 18, 2014 -
Re: Most wanted writers!
Hello review from romania. ~ I have complete understanding with the message of this. We need better writers or at least people who try to make thier next work better ...
Aug 18, 2014 -
Re: The Peace in this World
Hello review time with Romania~ First in the forth paragraph you forgot the "p" in "up" and missed a 'm' in summer. Thats all i noticed during the first read, ...
Aug 9, 2014 -
Re: Violins
Hello review time with Romania. ~ First your rythme schme dosn't read very well because everything rythmes with head. You should know the system of A,B,C,D rythmes. Use it please. ...
Aug 9, 2014 -
Re: Restless Night
Hello review time with Romania. ~ I can see this being a picture book with Dr. Suess illustrations. Its just the way the poems flows ands its easy read. I ...
Aug 9, 2014 -
Re: Arms
Hello I'm here to review. First its a litttle sad its so small. The message is nice but you didnt even use correct grammar. I strongly suggest adding more lines ...
Aug 8, 2014 -
Re: Waiting and watching
Its review time with the best country in the world, Romania. ~ First you forgot to capitolize "what" i sentenced two, six, ten and forteen. Also the "can't" in the ...
Aug 8, 2014 -
Re: the steps to create an avalanche.
Hello time for a review. I knowticed your a newbie to this site like me so hears some tips. Always write like your most ferosious english teacher is going to ...
Aug 8, 2014 -
Re: She's Just a pawn
Hello review time with me, Romania. I am not a grammer person what I'm about to say may be complete @&%$, but dont forget your commas. Theres a huge difference ...
Aug 8, 2014 -
Re: Linkzude16's Writing Tips
Hey stranger whats up? Review time. I think it would be easier for people to read if you bullet pointed your writing tips. Like in a powerpoint. Also the quotes ...
Aug 8, 2014 -
Re: Sun Seeker
Its review time. ~~~ The only confusion I have is the second line: "drinking rain as some drink wine", the way the sentence is written gives a postive connotation to ...
Aug 8, 2014 -
Re: It came down to Star Wars, in the end.
Its a nice short read. I realize its a memory but i noticed you have been a member for a while but try to add more complex vocabulary in order ...
Aug 8, 2014 -
Re: Tree's Revenge
This reminds me of the old goosebumps stories i used to read as a kid. Its very nice but if you want to improve on a higher levels of writing ...
Aug 6, 2014 -
Re: Baby
Interesting take on a mother and baby. I never really thought of mothers being slaves to their kids but it is true. I like the rythmetical reader in the work ...
Aug 6, 2014 -
Re: Teach Me How To Dance
I dont know if its strange but i read the girls part first and then the boys. At first I was confused obviously for olny getting half of eath story ...
Aug 6, 2014
