Hello there! I haven't read your other reviews, so I run the risk of repeating what they've said. That said, let's dive right into this.
I find this poem very interesting, because it's rather vague, but at the same time it portrays a very certain sense of anger and frustration with the world - at least for me, haha. It's definitely something that different readers can read extremely differently, which is an interesting approach in the world of poetry, especially since most poems - free verse or otherwise - depend on the reader's interpretation, and they try to shape the reader's interpretation through their imagery.
As a result, having a poem with such limited imagery is strange in a refreshing sort of way. You begin with the avalanche, and you carry that through in a progressive way, staying true to the title of the piece more than anything. I do think that there may have been some benefit in elongating it a little and giving the reader a little more, but that's all I really have to say on that front.
I do enjoy the way you vary your style and structure from the italicized portion to the non-italicized portion, going from longer, flowing lines to the more abrupt and punctuated statements that are treated as fact in the context of the poem itself. I think it could have been emphasized in another sort of way, but I'm not sure how else - I'm personally a fan of differentiating with italics and non-italics, but this piece feels like it's... missing something big between the two parts.
Overall, very little critique on this piece. I think that as far as poetry goes, it could have a bit more detail with the imagery and the emotion, but it's got a solid concept and solid execution. Keep writing!
Points: 50
Reviews: 425
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