Arms

Hello I'm here to review. First its a litttle sad its so small. The message is nice but you didnt even use correct grammar. I strongly suggest adding more lines with an abundent amount of intense vocabulary. Your rating are spot on though and thats importent too. I havn't read anyother of your works if have posted any yet but please try to put more work in the writing.

Hello, eleutheromania! Unknown391625 here with another review!

Ok, so, down to the obvious stuff. This is a nice and neat little poem. It is romantic, and slightly dramatic, so good job on categorizing the genres. Same with the rating. I do have only two nitpick and they are a bit important to writing good poetry. Ok so first, you need some punctuation. On your first line, you started a sentence, and then you started another sentence without punctuating the previous sentence. On with the next one. Your very last word shouldn't be an individual line. It need to go in the line above it. Overall, good job, I liked it. I will look for more of your poems. Don't give up and always write!

-Unknown391625

P.S, Hope you take those tips into consideration. It will improve your poetry immensely.

This is really short. Yes, I know I am stating the obvious, sorry.

So this is a nice few lines. It could almost be lyrics to a song. I like the idea you have painted with your words here. It is a way that I think all of us feel at one time or another. That if we can just hold something tight enough we won't lose it.

Sadly that isn't always true and I would have loved to see this poem go into that aspect. That being said this is still good.

I do think that the lay out of your lines could have been a bit more appealing to the reader's eye. For example;

***
If I could hold you

Maybe I could keep you

In my arms forever.

Never doubting

If you wanted to stay.

***

It just looks a little neater.

But that is about it. I don't really have anything else I can say about this except that you could defiantly expand on this thought.

Keep writing.

-DG