Riedawriter23

Ariel! I know I said I hated her like...maybe four minutes ago, but she's such an interesting character. I can only guess what Jon is feeling and that guess would ...

Awwww a baby? That's so cute, and starts a lot of conflict. I never knew that Ariel had become pregnant, but then again that was probably your intention. lol The ...

Okay, again. I'm different. I did feel sorry for Sarah in this. I didn't know that she was doing all of this for Jon, otherwise I'd probably have liked her ...

Oh great you made me think....Now I'll have to look that up, maybe later. lol I really liked your analogies and descriptions, and again I say, you made me think ...

lol, this is really cute. It's cute, funny, and descriptive actually. My favorite line: swirl like a milkmaid churning butter. Up. Down. Ceaseless whirling. Devouring my heart *Very creative, especial

Hm, this was very nice. I do have to say that the "Lover not meant for this World" part gave it a certain rythym. But it was sort of getting ...

This was interesting. It had great word usage and really strong feeling behind it, though I think you should change the title? The title is a little demeaning and amatuer ...

This is really interesting. I don't think I've read anything with this plot and, as many stories prove to be cliche, you did a great job on reality. Also, you ...

This was very nice. I like how you separated your lines. It made this look very clean and as far as I saw there were no errors. Great job on ...

Oh that's wonderful Brad! I mean I knew that Jon couldn't hurt Kyle...but Kyle, I can't really say that I know for sure he's not taking Jon away. I hope ...

This was really interesting and for grade 3? Nice job. I won't be too harsh, lol, it was only the fact that some lines seemed forced to rhyme and didn't ...

Nice job with word usage and lines. But I couldn't help but noticing that your punctuation is off. There are so many commas and not enough periods. Other than that, ...

I love the ending of this, but the beggining is a little sketchy. Also(and I know this happens a lot in poetry) you repeated yourself a lot. I'm not just ...

This is very interesting. I liked the beggining part no doubt but the end sort have surprised me. I expected that to happen, but I mean I was also expecting ...

Awww, this was sad. I really do love your description and everthing though. It flowed like a story/poem, I liked it that way. I understood exactly what you were saying ...