Riedawriter23

This is scary! I love scary books so I won't have trouble sleeping lol, you did a GREAT job on it! Hehe, I love it when Leela asked "What was ...

OMG Prostheses is amazing! You're right, it's a little more gory than Ch. but it's still wonderful. I felt the pain of the little boy, I mean....OW! He was awake ...

...I feel like a criminal looking at illegal files...Woo! That was great and so cute! I loved it when Kyle had the wax lips on, lol, I could really imagine ...

Ah, this is very nice. I love your descriptions and your ending. Besides that,spelling and grammar is great and sentence structure is lovely! Again I say, I loved your ending, ...

Omg you have great ending on these as well?! You are so awesome. I'm already dying to read this and I haven't even finished Ch.! Ooo, I can't wait to ...

This IS interesting and nice word usage, but I really can't relate nor do I know what this is about. Can you do this, can you do that? If you ...

Something is going to happen to one of them?! *shivers* I hope not...but if something does happen I hope that it's Kyle since Jon is on his breaking point, or ...

Ooo, this is a very interesting plot so far. I like how you started out. That was cute. lol And you can add action to this! It would be really ...

I like this. It's very easy to read and flows great. I also like the story behind the whole thing. I'd like to know more about this character, er, these ...

No! NOW they disturb Kyle and Jon?! You have to be kidding me. lol, I have to admit you had me going though, nice job on that. So...they didn't kiss ...

*Cries* That was sad. :( At first I was happy because Jon and Kyle were getting along and in the back of my head I knew that this was when ...

Awww, poor Kyle. I though he was going to die, that was terrible I almost had a heartattack. I loved how you made it sound so freaky, I mean Jon ...

Ariel still loves Jon, I knew it, and now she might get in the way of Kyle and Jon which is a bad thing because she's supposed to be getting ...

Wow this was really nice! Sad but nice, and this was your first topic? Great job. Now down to correcting(I don't have much to say so this won't be bad ...

This was very...interesting. I liked the idea of it all but it all seemed a little random to me, maybe if you brought it just a tinsy insy bit closer ...