Renard

Hello. Well first thing is: I don't remember reading the original story so I can go into this with fresh eyes. Second thing is: this is realllllllllllllllllllly long. I hope ...

Hello. So you're a descriptive writer, in the sense that you don't use dialogue. Which you really should. And is one of my main points in this review: Good Points ...

Hello. :) This is definitely a character study, because it is very description orientated. I dislike your introduction: Orin Nueron wasn’t sure where he actually was. As far as he ...

Hello. My review. :) Good Points 1. First person narrative makes the events seem more personal 2. It reads like a fairytale and is quite interesting to make sense of ...

Hello. it's difficult to garner the POV of this narrative and also, the purpose of the work. What exactly are you trying to say in this piece? Now clearly, the ...

Hello! You have the perfect combination of poetry I like to see. 1. Good length 2. Good structure 3. I like the way you omitted punctuation to make it flow ...

D'awww. This is a sweet work. It's very personal too. I love you. As it goes on, it becomes more and more confessional. Now that's ok to you - because ...

Hello. I think this splits the balance between fact and fiction. Obviously you are writing about something personal: I dedicate this story to the military force of my country, Pakistan. ...

Hello. I don't necessarily think this is 'very terrible,' but it could use some editing. So you are writing a story about a zombie apocalypse. Ok. That's not an original ...

Hello. I understand that this is written about a dream, but to me, it reads like an ancient fairytale. Something across between Hansel and Gretel and the Gingerbread Man. It's ...

Hello. After reading your poem I immediately noticed several things about it: Good Points 1. The structure of the stanzas: easy to read and interesting to look at. 2. You ...

Hello. There are a lot of spelling and grammatical errors in this piece. I won't comment on them all because it would be unfair and it would take too long. ...

Hello. This poem is very allegorical and the narrative element works well in building the image of the 'jester' and the court that you have hear. The meaning in the ...

Hello. This is a very experimental piece of writing. You seem to be making a sort of movie here with this idea. And that's the thing - I think this ...

Hello. Since the technical points of this work had been pointed out in the previous review, I will focus on the content and style here. I have several comments to ...