Rav1209

I really like your poem it's so worth the read which my tired eyes can't really stand right now. The only thing I'm having a problem with is the last ...

Nice story so far I love you incoporated greek myths! It's really awesome. You have a few repeat sentences and it's kind of hard to tell who your talking about ...

Nice story so far I love you incoporated greek myths! It's really awesome. You have a few repeat sentences and it's kind of hard to tell who your talking about ...

Okay in my novice opinion in poetry i liked it. The only thing that bothered me was the abruptness of this line "then you heard a loud beep" i know ...

First I like to say awesome poem I like all your sweet rhymes. The only thing that bothered me was the part about no one remembering janes name because she ...

Fantastic poem something I really relate to personally. I really like the tone of this just because it's a good way of how you executed it. Sorry if that sentence ...

It's good for a prologue. It has really good gripping detail that has me wanting more. It makes me curious of these small creatures. I have a suggestion in stead ...

Very well sinister but I like it shoes the passion of the hate for this person and I love how you don't go outand say I hope you die but ...

I like to say I enjoyed your story to a certain point. There was a certain weirdness to Vince liking Melanie after the made a joke about her. Then there's ...

First I like to say that I enjoyed your story with all it's wonderful detail. One of the things I didn't get and I know this has been stated before ...

i really wasn't sure if you were writing in the pov of hercules or not. and i also thought it was weird that only one if not a couple of ...

Mann you had me going i was going to say hell isnt always sad it can be funny... i really like how you said game and im really hoping you ...

you have a sentence that has my door twice and nothing is punctuated. I'm sure if you keep at it and practice it will come instantly to you like when ...

1. I hate reading unfinished work on the internet because i feel its like dissing your publiscist and you didn't want to take the time to finish it. Especially when ...

The way how you make humans out to be monsters so boldly is well bold. I like it how you compare stress and with something sharp and merciless and the ...