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Re: Oh My Word
*claps* wait no, *applauds* Thank you for taking the words straight out of my mouth -or mind. I live in the UK, and there are some pretty horrific things that ...
Nov 27, 2014 -
Re: Ariel-White-Black
This is a very well written story; but there are just a few things I don't understand, one being that most of the things mentioned in that story happened about ...
Nov 24, 2014 -
Re: Torn
Again, I just reviewed another poem by you, this is really good; dramatic -as writing should be. I said in my other review of your work, about the capital letter ...
Nov 23, 2014 -
Re: Okay
Just what I've been thinking recently, you captured what I have been thinking without me even knowing I felt it; I sometimes struggle with empathy, but I really felt what ...
Nov 23, 2014 -
Re: Together forever
As a poem it worked really nicely, the whole thing with losing the one you love, and when they say "forever" that captures what I was thinking a couple of ...
Nov 23, 2014 -
Re: Drowning
The wording in this poem is beautiful, and really captures what love is to you. The layout is my only concern though; usually, when one goes on to the next ...
Nov 8, 2014 -
Re: Surgery
Firstly, this probably should have been rated a sixteen, I'm nearly fifteen and don't get grossed out by that sort of thing; but that was just a little too much. ...
Nov 5, 2014 -
Re: What Do You Need in Your Life
Well done, I loved reading this essay; I agreed with so many of your principles of life, especially the part about the limo (plus the only people who can have ...
Nov 5, 2014 -
Re: The melting of Ted Turner's Lawn
I think my mind was just blown by the amount of imagination that went into that story; all the ideas about the Snowflakes being unique and having their own opinion ...
Nov 3, 2014 -
Re: The Washing Machine Man
This nearly brought a tear to my eye, and I almost never cry at books. They way you tell the story, and paint the pictures of the characters so clearly ...
Nov 3, 2014 -
Re: The Last Sun
This story really got me thinking about life, and how when we all die, there will be no one left to interoperate what we have done, who we were, etc; ...
Nov 3, 2014 -
Re: Let's Get Lost
Yes, the translation is correct; and a beautiful poem it is too. I like the way you kept it short -and didn't make it feel like it had an abrupt ...
Nov 3, 2014 -
Re: The Dead Body Infront Of Me
This really played a trick on my mind and was really clever; well done. Just a few mistakes though: "I took one last look at the body that use(d) to ...
Nov 3, 2014 -
Re: TO DAD
This was probably the most heart warming thing I've read all day, it really lifts my heart to see that you really love your Dad. One mistake though, "Dad's like ...
Nov 3, 2014 -
Re: A criuse through the river.
I like how you start; but following on from what Aarica said, there were too many commas for my liking in the first sentence. After the phrase "life is a ...
Nov 2, 2014
