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  • Short Story » Historical Fiction, General Re: By Sea, By Sail

    Hi! This is going to be a short review... But anyways, let's get started, shall we? Basically, the main thing that came rushing into my head first was the pace ...

    Mar 9, 2015
  • Short Story » Teen Fiction, Action / Adventure Re: Alex

    Okay. Woah. So my first two thoughts: Info dump and super meaty paragraphs that need to be split up . Okay, first. Info dump. Already, the first paragraph we get: ...

    Mar 9, 2015
  • Short Story » Historical Fiction, Culture Re: Ender and the War of The Mongols (story for school)

    Hi :) This is a nice little story you have here - I had some recommendations though. First - it's not really clear. Is it time travel, or a dream? ...

    Mar 9, 2015
  • Poetry » Lyrical, Realistic Re: The Twilight Smell

    This is simply beautiful. The detail, imagery, and description in this is fantastically written. The only things that bothered (you could say) me were... remind me of a lamplight that's ...

    Mar 9, 2015
  • Short Story » Mystery / Suspense, Horror Re: Vardøger

    Hiya. Wow, I love how at the beginning everything was terrifying, then in the middle it became sweet, and by the end it was all sad. The first thing I ...

    Mar 8, 2015
  • Short Story » Historical Fiction, Fantasy Re: Turn out your Light

    Hi! First, might I suggest to put a rating for 12+ and violence on here? Just a suggestion with the death scene. Okay, so the actual review. You did a ...

    Mar 8, 2015
  • Novel / Chapter » Fanfiction, Humor Re: Being Slim - MMFD Fanfic

    Hi, there. So, this is a little confusing. Is the story of all these people talking in her diary? When does her diary entry end? It doesn't really make sense, ...

    Mar 8, 2015
  • Short Story » Historical Fiction, General Re: Elixir

    Hi, there. First let me start off with that you obviously did your research and got a couple facts in here. Well done. I remember in school some time studying ...

    Mar 8, 2015
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Chasing Winter

    Wow. I have to say, this was spectacular. I love the idea of using seasons as characters! Your description of the forest was also beautifully written, and I love the ...

    Mar 8, 2015
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Life chapter 1

    Hello :) I'm here for a quick review. So, first off, I want to say that your tenses are a little scattered and messed up. Be sure to stay in ...

    Mar 8, 2015
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: //

    Hi, there. I'm here to give you a review. First, I just wanted to say this reminds me a lot of the series the Unwanteds. But the plot seems smooth ...

    Mar 8, 2015
  • Poetry » Realistic, Other Re: This is the School of Chaos

    Hi, there. Let me dive in. *coughs* Okay, so this is simple but so very relatable this is killing me. It's one of those things where everyone can feel like ...

    Mar 8, 2015
  • Short Story » Historical Fiction, Narrative Re: The falling

    Hi, I'm here to give you a short review. First, I just wanted to say you do include quite a lot of facts in your story. You need to spread ...

    Mar 8, 2015
  • Poetry » General, General Re: An Entrepreneur's Lament

    Hi, I'm here to attempt to review this magnificent piece of poetry you have written. (I don't review poetry very well...) Okay! Now, first of all, I loved the imagery ...

    Mar 8, 2015
  • Other » Fantasy, Other Re: Where is Percy?

    Hiya :) So, I just wanted to point out - I am a majorly major fan of Percy Jackson. I love the start of this so far (is it a ...

    Mar 8, 2015


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