Princess

Hey llobalito! Well, I read this and think: "Gosh, what did she ever do to him?" Give your readers more to go off of. Give them a reason to think ...

I understand exactly how you feel. Reading through your poem, I understand that he wronged you and you don't like him for it, but what else is there? You go ...

Hello and welcome to YWS! When I read this poem, I get hints and tastes of the real life behind this poem. That is good, but I need to be ...

Hey Raider! Welcome to YWS. I must remind you that for every poem/story that you submit, you have to do at least two reviews. Its only fair :wink: Now this ...

Here as requested! Very good first song, but I would have to admit, this is a tad bit cliche. Perhaps you should give an extra twist, such as talking about ...

Hey Dark Angel! You wrote this poem to try to put the reader in the models position, right? To me, it seemed rather bleak. If you want the reader to ...

Hi expiring! It may just sound like a 13 year old kid talking here, but this poem (if you have read harry potter) sounds like something Luna Lovegood wrote. I ...

Here as requested, Ducati! I really enjoyed reading this poem, because I can actually relate to it. So you talked about being overshadowed by your sister, right? This poem has ...

Hey! This is a pretty good poem concerning where we go when we die. Since the human race understands so little of this, its good to wonder in our poems. ...

Hey God! Before I start the critique, I must point out that stone cannot rust, and therefore, that line is irrelevant. What is the point of this poem? Your just ...

Hi Panda! Welcome to YWS! This poem does not mention, even once, that this is about gay rights. You should mention it at least once so the readers understand. This ...

Hey God! When you come to poetry, it would be best not to mention times or dates, or the amount of time passes. It just screws up the whole timeless ...

Hi Macs! I can see where you are going with this poem. You say you want to go to a paradise to get away from your troubles. Give us some ...

Hey there! Welcome to YWS! Hmm...I can't really tell what this poem is about. Why is it called test if your talking about love? Or are you talking about love? ...

Hey! Okay, the first line confuses me. It says that your fighting your passions, right? But in the next line, why does it say "But"? It totally confuses the reader. ...