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Hi Japanese Ninja! This poem is very nice. There is much to be learned though :( "Catching bugs on a sunny day Praying for sun so we can play" This ...

Hello there!:) I am so sorry for your loss. Reviewing your poems, I can truly feel the pain that you are in. Okay, I loved your first stanza, or poem, ...

Hey Peanut! Here as requested:) Fading to the night If your MC's house was burning down, this isn't the best way to phrase it. Perhaps you should change it up ...

Hello there! Welcome to YWS! I must remind you that you must review 4 times per piece of writing that you post, so make sure you get those reviews in! ...

Hey Jared! Okay, so I am a pianist too, so I can really connect with this piece. I sat down at the piano and played e minor several times, and ...

Now now Galerius. This work isn't necessarily bad. It's quite fixable. As I stare into your eyes, the color of the open sea. He is right when he says this ...

Hello there 77479. Um. Are these supposed to by lyrics? Because they would go in the lyrics section. Thats completely different than lyric poetry. First off, you really need to ...

Hello there fell! Welcome to YWS! I would like to remind you that you must have at least four reviews per piece of writing that you submit, so please get ...

Hey there dearie! Welcome to YWS! Okay lets get down to it! Words flow from my pen, as blood flows from my heart. I added the as because it just ...

Hello there! Wow you are very descriptive! What I'm amazed at is that you described so much that I don't understand the story. All I understand is that there was ...

Hello there forestqueen! It's a lovely poem, but there's no meat in it. What I want you to do is add more metaphors, similes, etc. I have been in the ...

Hey silent! Here as requested! I'll review it in two sections. Emotional, and physical. Emotional: Poetry is made to make the reader feel your emotions. I sense in this poem ...

That was beautiful! This poem is totally unique, and I love it! The rhyming, as you said, was unintentional, so I suggest you take it out. It distracts the reader ...

Hey Clo! This story is so beautiful! I loved it! She feared the message of a song, and eventually I tired of the song anyway. Eventually we started listening to ...

Heya! Emma here! The overall feeling of 'Healing' is very good. It is short, sweet, and to the point. But, being me, I have to point out a few niches ...