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This is incredible! it has the rhythm of a nursery rhyme, short and rolling, yet such un-nursery-rhyme-like content. The language is eloquent and has a good array of "poetic" words ...

Very mysterious and engaging with a deep meaning I'm too uneducated to grasp. The first line is very good, nice sibilance and it was clever to substitute bin for basin/bath. ...

This is an interesting article with many truths so I enjoyed it because of that. However personally I don't agree with a few, especially 3,7,9,10. This doesn't mean they're not ...

If this is the whole first chapter then I don't think it's enough. There is not enough here to draw us in. You have just described a few mundane events ...

This is incredible! I have recently read "1984" so this is clicking with many similar themes as I read. You describe such a mysterious, horrifying version of reality, and I ...

I loved this! This is the sort of piece I've been looking to read for a while. Simply put, cleverly explored, it has the sort of ideas that i would ...

After the first line I was already formulating the brilliant review I was going to write for this (Brilliant as in the poem is brilliant not the review :P). The ...

Hi! Ive only ever tried my hand at haikus and senryus a few times so I am not very knowledgeable about them but I enjoyed this very much. This is ...

I have just finished reading "life of Pi" and it now holds the place as my favourite book. Coincidently, I have not been on YWS for about 8 months and ...

Apart from the grammatical and structural mistakes other commenters have made I wouldnt change anything. This reminds me of the scene in "The Lion King" with the elephants graveyard actually. ...

Very beautiful language. I love your imagery in the first stanza and the contrasting colours sets up a powerful mental image of the scene. The whole execution of the poem ...

Very funny. I loved it. I would love to see some sort of news-paper made purely to be a collection of funny yet insightful pieces like this. I adds a ...

This is going to be my first review in a while so i apologise if it isnt very helpful. I'll try my best. I really like this poem. To me ...

I dont have time right now to do a long review but there are a few things. I love it!!!!!! I love the language and the structure. Because you haven't ...

This is so fantastic. It is officially my favourite poem on this site and in my top three favourite poems ever along with "The white knights song" and "Do not ...