Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
Anyway let's get right to it,
The breeze blows through the window, brushing her hair. Eyelids fluttering she awakens. She rolls over moaning as if in pain. Another day she thinks as She Kicks the thin blankets off her skinny body. She gets up and walks over to the window and leans on the windowsill, staring out to the world before her. She dresses in faded jeans and a big sweatshirt that is worn with holes by the elbows. She pulls on some converse and heads towards the front door. Running down the stairs she thinks silently of literally nothing. She hops on a rusting bike and sets off for the big city. There its almost deserted only the kind of people who are lost in a state of loneliness and confusion. Entering the heart of the city she hops off her bike. She joins others sitting on the grand stairs once leading up to a bank. Beth looms up to the flawless sky and thinks why? What's the point?
Okay, well, this is a very interesting choice of first chapter right there, it is quite small for a first chapter, and honestly, this does seem to only have enough happening here to be included in the first paragraph of a first chapter, so yeah, if this is going to actually be the first chapter of this here story, you really do want to try and add a few more things to it.
Besides the slight lack of content though, the content that we actually do have here is pretty good, it showcases sort of the mental and physical state of our protagonist in a pretty good amount of detail right there, it all seems to give off a very relaxed vibe for the most part especially towards the start with everything sounding rather routinely there, it captures that title quite well in that regard.
And I do love that ending, its not too strange, but its just about suspicious enough that as a reader you really want to find out more about what could've happened there, and so it makes this just that little bit mysterious. All in all, not a bad start to a novel here, but I do think you could probably add a bit more if this is in fact going to be the first chapter of this story.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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