PinkPanther

Hey! Here with the review I promised. I hope you can repay the favor and review something of mine! :) So, first of all, no commas in the first stanza? ...

Hey! I'm panther, (in case you couldn't read my username.) Let's get right to it. "When your conscience comes calling" comma here, "it's best to listen." "Sadly, my conscience could ...

Hey, I'm panther, (in case you couldn't read my username.) Let's get to it. "Was he and Beverly in cahoots?" was is singular, you need "were." "Picard began spluttering indignantly, ...

"My daze turns into days." what does that mean? "realizing he can only come to me at night." This grammatically doesn't work with the rest of the (stanza?) stuff that ...

Hey, fellow... person! I like lines 3, 5-6, 10-11. "For what reason should folks look me in the eye," you can just say "why should..." It's too wordy otherwise. I ...

I took some liberties. Forgive me. It's just easier for me to review this way - telling people exactly what to change, but you don't have to take my advice ...

Hey there! Carrie First off, "absolutely" in the 2nd line doesn't change the verb. “I’ll pick her up.” Who says that? It could be anyone. It's odd that Dougie, being ...

Eeh, what can I say, good job? - doesn't seem too appropriate... Great job? - closer to it. It was great, even though I had no idea what you tried ...

It's allright. Some parts need revision because you tried to make it rhyme and it didn't quite make sence, but overall, nice job. The stanza: “Are you the heroes you ...

Well, I'm being honest right now, hope you're not one of those people to take it strong, but I didn't like it. The point you were trying to show was ...

All right, I know poetry isn't supposed to make sence - but really. It was good, but either I'm stupid (which as far as I know isn't the case) or ...

That was so funny! I know you probably didn't mean it to be humorous, but that was so realistic!!! Did that actually happen to you? Cause it did to me!! ...

That was a really good poem. I don't think you should keep a certain number of lines in each letter because it kinda emphesizes the point that her as well ...

Um, I didn't really get the point of that, but allright go with that - awesome job. A little repetetive, and deffinitely not world-class literature but I do get what ...

That was a very nice poem, the doubled lines added some emphasis on the right areas. I could deffinitely feel that bridge in it where you decided to give him ...