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Re: Fields of Vision
Hello! I really like the idea behind your poem! I like how you represent the biases of the different people as very different things: ashes and the sun. What is ...
Feb 14, 2016 -
Re: Brother
Hello! So I'm not as familiar with the quatern structure as other structures, so I'll be reviewing mainly just for content. I liked the images that your descriptions brought up, ...
Feb 4, 2016 -
Re: Our Life (Part 2)
Hello! Just a warning I have not read the first part. With that said, this was an interesting poem, I liked it! At first I really liked how the dialogue ...
Jan 31, 2016 -
Re: Sightseeing
Hello! This is a great poem! I liked the repetition of certain phrases and words throughout, it made it more complete. There were a couple lines that seemed to awkwardly ...
Jan 31, 2016 -
Re: Game On Level 1.6
Hello! Just letting you know I have not read your earlier installments- but now I think I will because this was really interesting! I have no idea what the over ...
Jan 31, 2016 -
Re: I am Luke.
Hey there! Wow, this poem. Just wow. As far as content goes, I have nothing to add or suggest. But here are a couple technical suggestions: "my mother couldn't sing ...
Jan 28, 2016 -
Re: What of Light?
Hey there! I loved this poem- it's not unnecessarily long or complicated. When I read the first stanza I was transported to my own room, envisioning it in the early ...
Jan 28, 2016 -
Re: Tick for Yes, Cross for No
Hello! I haven't reviewed in a while, so I apologise in advance if anything's not cohesive or if I'm not clear. Also I have not read the memoir this is ...
Jan 28, 2016 -
Re: Color Photographs, Chapter One
Hey ShadowVyper! Your story is very intriguing, I like it a lot so far. As far as the title goes, I'm assuming that it has something to do with the ...
May 31, 2015 -
Re: The Rich Witch
Hey firebird! This'll be a short review, but I do have a couple of suggestions. To begin with, I would split the first line in two, cutting it after "what" ...
May 16, 2015 -
Re: Dreams
Hi gwen! First of all, welcome to YWS! I really love the way you formatted your poem, it makes it more than just a post on the website- more of ...
May 16, 2015 -
Re: Conversations with Myself: Chapter 1 - A Bookworm's Torment
Hello! Your first chapter is very well written and your descriptions are wonderful. Probably what I like the most of your piece is how it so effortlessly moves from topic ...
Nov 28, 2013 -
Re: The Sun Protested
Hello there! Firstly, I would like to say that your poem is really great, with only a few things that I noticed while reading. You're a natural at poetry! There ...
Oct 21, 2013 -
Re: Doom Making It's Way.
Hello! So this is a very interesting poem, I like it. The topic definitely intrigued me, and this is a cool spin on what you could do with the topic ...
Sep 23, 2013 -
Re: The Circle of Life (in the key of Em)
Hello! So I really like the poem and its flow, it's not quite the normal way to part lines in a poem, but it still works really nicely. My main ...
Sep 23, 2013
