PenguinAttack

I enjoyed reading this, an insight into somwhere I rather don't like to go hehe. Myth pointed out all the issues that I could see, so I won't try to ...

Ahh, crazy kids, I loved this, while I agree about that first stanzas last line - it seems a little stilted- I really like all of the rest. I think ...

Lovely. You're just going to kick me out of the water arent you? (yay pirate allusion - water - I didnt think it was a good idea to continue priate ...

Love this. So very simple and yet fully developed. Muchas well done (not tha' tha likes o' you needsa compliments from tha likesa moie) but yes. very nice. I especially ...

I rekon this could go either way. While it didn't grab me and keep my attention too well, I did enjoy the concept and you have some lovely description (points ...

I am, as always it seems, in awe of your talent =D. I cannot, nay! will not, wait for a new chapter.... I lie, I will wait =D You already ...

This is good, well; I liked it. =D I will say that I think it is a little long, just in that I felt that it should have ended at ...

Your harsh screams peirce the night like blades, leaving scars and slowly bleeding you dry, my love. Dry... I'm not entirely sure why, but this stanza stares out at me ...

I have placed my gramatical and punctual corrections in italics underneath the original lines (It should be very clear :wink: ) "square on in between the eyes." " squarely between ...

Amazing, truly truly amazing. I particularily love the style of this, the sharp sentances and the descriptions. I believe this is fantastic (if you hadn't realised :) ) The only ...

. The blocks did not speak though, that's impossible. She stared blankly out the window of the hospital, her husband rubbing her shoulders which her hospital gown hung loosely.. Hey, ...

oooohhh Jig thinks he rocks the socks of life now doesnt he. Shh! *shifty look* just because he does doesn't mean he needs to know it! ehehehe. Seriously though (as ...

I cannot help but adore the Roaring dragon (scientific name Draco Clamarius). that is, perhaps, my most loved part of this text. I do look forward to your next installment ...

A rather delightful little thing. I enjoyed reading it. A small issue: and image of a broken star Is this meant to be 'an' instead of 'and'? It would seem ...

When he sees me look at me, Just the one thing that stuck out (grammar and punctuation arent my strong point) I rather thing this should be "when he sees ...