Paracosm

Hey there yellow! Wonderful poem! I normally don’t enjoy poetry and find it very hard to finish. I found this poem very pleasing to read inspire of the somber subject ...

Hey! Shino here! I like what you have here! My tips in this review are going to be about clarity and organization. Clarity: The reader needs to know what action ...

Hey there! This is my first review in probably over a year... so we'll see if I can help out! The hook is just plain sick. I read the first ...

Hey lil2020! I think writing this story in first person is a good decision. First person tends to allow the reader to emphasize with the character more. The trouble with ...

Hey Romania! Nice work. I love the theme to your poem, there are just a few issues with word usage. Forgive me if you already know this, and if it ...

Hey there, Roundsquare! I love your writing style. Your character interactions are very entertaining. I can tell you put a good deal of effort into shaping the dialog between Jonathan ...

This is a pretty nice descriptive piece. I found it enjoyably dreamlike. I didn't like how it was one solid block of text, but as you said, you're going to ...

Hey Leah! This is pretty darn cute. Have you thought of expanding it any? It's an artistic whole as it is, but if you have other feelings on the topic, ...

Hey Stella! You are off to an awesome start. When you are writing a serial, your beginning has to raise interesting questions, you've got that handled here. I will definitely ...

Hey there Hightop! Paracosm here for your review. Annabelle found it hard to breath with the ropes tugging on her chest. -Breath should be breathe. "'Tis alright" she said, turning ...

Hey Pompadour! Review time. You can hear the sinister tinkling, Of a faint long ago bell This line stood out because the phrasing towards the end is weak compared to ...

Hey Gummy! I'm going to do a quick review. I hope you enjoy it as much as I enjoyed this poem. To start with: Throat hot as hell, as Death ...

Hey there, Achu! I'm going to do a quick review. To begin with, I always look at a text to see how the paragraphs are formatted. This is a pretty ...

Hey Auxiira! In stanza three, 'he' should be 'the'. This poem is well written, but a little basic. Try to flesh it out some more. What does writing mean to ...

Hey Amey! I'm gonna do a quick review. For at this hour nobody would be in a street like this. Consider revising this sentence, because 'this' is repetitive. You might ...