PandaAiKorai

My absolute favorite line, out of the entire poem, is this one, The pearls of the opaque eyes Pearls, typically white, represent purity, whilst the adjective "opaque" represents something one ...

Your usage of words is very appealing. I can't help but be entranced by what you have to say. Though, quite frankly, with so many meanings in the piece, I ...

Down with modernism! I like the way you think, and cannot agree more. I truly enjoy your use of slant rhyme, and the way your words flow. However, I have ...

How am I supposed to breathe, If I 'm swimming through waves? How is it possible to see, If sight is a blurry haze? How am I supposed to cry, ...

HA! That last part made me chuckle. Very creative ending, very humorous. Only one part bothered me however. "Panic started to overwhelm me... Only water was there to surround me..." ...

"As the violins began to play faster." This is a sentence fragment. Unless you meant to combine this sentence with the one below it. "tuto had sprinkles of gold sparkles ...

One word that this entire piece needs: Detail. A lot of it is very vague. What truly caused her to limp? Why does her father call her a "whore"? Why ...

I'm reviewing from my mobile, since I was too impatient to use my laptop, haha! So it won't look as extensive as it possibly could. At any rate, I enjoyed ...

Reminds me of Romeo and Juliet. Or rather, this one series by Caroline B. Cooney- though, darn, the title escapes me! However, I do so enjoy it. The imagery I'd ...

Admittedly, the ONLY part that bothered me, and it's rather insignificant, is how you rhyme only one line. But, quite frankly, it adds the lyrical aspect of the entire piece, ...

A woman. As someone who once dated the ladies, I have to say, this describes them all too well. How their moods change, and leave you on the edge. How ...

In the first three lines alone, you're being rather redundant. And in that... fourth sentence, I=if. Windshield wipers go "back and forth, back and forth". It makes more sense. "[a] ...

Everyone always beats me to the errors! But, it seems that he pointed out the important problems. However, I do have a suggestion. When posting a short story, it's good ...

Haha! Very creative, and hilarious. The slight sarcasm buried in the piece add so much more spice to the humor of the poem! I greatly enjoyed this piece. No grammatical ...

Very nice! Though, Hell's Kitchen certainly didn't come to mind! Actually, when reading this, it reminded me of the book Dorian Gray, you heard of it? It's about a man ...