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  • Poetry » Narrative, Dramatic Re: Swimming on my Own

    Hey there, its Ayma here for a review. First of all I wanted to say that this is an awesome and very well written piece, so I don't really have ...

    May 19, 2017
  • Poetry » Lyrical, Lyrical Re: Repetoire

    Hey, its Ayma here! This was very well put together, and I am blown away by the flow of this piece! I'll be honest, the reason i clicked on this ...

    Apr 19, 2017
  • Poetry » General, General Re: All the things I've never said

    I relate to this very much, and i think it is a beautiful piece of art. One thing is that your flow was a tad choppy here and there, such ...

    Apr 17, 2017
  • Poetry » General, Realistic Re: Cosmos

    Hello! This is literally my first review in at least six months, so I am so sorry if it is unhelpful! My skill is definately not in reviewing :p Okie ...

    Dec 13, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Other Re: Fading Fairytales - Chapter One

    I am not very good at reviewing, just so you know. I will more or less be making suggestions than anything else... but i figure this story has been out ...

    May 4, 2015
  • Short Story » Realistic, General Re: Snake Pit

    fixing some of the spaces and such ()=i suggest {}= it was wrong --= spelling fix The sun scorched the ground below mingling with the gentle wind to create the ...

    Feb 22, 2015
  • Poetry » General, Realistic Re: A Summer Song

    I basically just edited it :) In the hot summer day, we sipped on lemonade. Having fun, at the beach we always played. - We swam at the bay of ...

    Feb 22, 2015
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Mystery / Suspense Re: Brother, Dear -- Part Three

    Okay, here is a little "review key" ()= i suggest {}= it was wrong --= spelling correction They were children. I was dealing with (random "A", lol) children. I sat ...

    Feb 22, 2015
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Fantasy Re: Shaping the world: scholars and ferals

    Here we go! This is the only way i know how to review, sorry if you don't understand! ()= i am suggesting you change it {}= it was wrong -word-= ...

    Feb 22, 2015
  • Short Story » Realistic, Action / Adventure Re: Need a Title

    The war started three years ago. In that period the cyborg drafts of (

    Feb 18, 2015
  • Poetry » Lyrical, Fanfiction Re: Deleted 52

    I only have a feww suggestions. This is an awesome poem, by the way, and it flows well. There were only one or two spots that i stumbled over my ...

    Dec 19, 2014
  • Poetry » Romantic, Dramatic Re: "Heartbreak"

    I'm going to go through the whole thing and point out little things that i think would be better, cause i am not that good at grammar and i have ...

    Oct 8, 2014
  • Poetry » General, General Re: life

    life brings gifts(, and) life brings love but brings sadness and pain it weakens you(, but all the more) strengthens you but may bring tears(,) it may bring smiles {it ...

    Mar 30, 2014
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Lyrical Re: Say Something

    "Silver-blue eyes firmly fixed on the floor, Sneakers tapping the floor to an unknown rhythm. I stare at the back of your head, Stomach churning and nerves strung like wire." ...

    Mar 16, 2014
  • Poetry » Realistic, Science Fiction Re: Your Shadow

    "A faceless twin following your every move, Grey and emotionless. Your shadow…" I don't this that the "Your Shadow" in this line fits very well, but that might just be ...

    Mar 16, 2014


Life is like an onion. You peel it off one layer at a time, and sometimes you weep.
— Carl Sandburg