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Re: Swimming on my Own
Hey there, its Ayma here for a review. First of all I wanted to say that this is an awesome and very well written piece, so I don't really have ...
May 19, 2017 -
Re: Repetoire
Hey, its Ayma here! This was very well put together, and I am blown away by the flow of this piece! I'll be honest, the reason i clicked on this ...
Apr 19, 2017 -
Re: All the things I've never said
I relate to this very much, and i think it is a beautiful piece of art. One thing is that your flow was a tad choppy here and there, such ...
Apr 17, 2017 -
Re: Cosmos
Hello! This is literally my first review in at least six months, so I am so sorry if it is unhelpful! My skill is definately not in reviewing :p Okie ...
Dec 13, 2016 -
Re: Fading Fairytales - Chapter One
I am not very good at reviewing, just so you know. I will more or less be making suggestions than anything else... but i figure this story has been out ...
May 4, 2015 -
Re: Snake Pit
fixing some of the spaces and such ()=i suggest {}= it was wrong --= spelling fix The sun scorched the ground below mingling with the gentle wind to create the ...
Feb 22, 2015 -
Re: A Summer Song
I basically just edited it :) In the hot summer day, we sipped on lemonade. Having fun, at the beach we always played. - We swam at the bay of ...
Feb 22, 2015 -
Re: Brother, Dear -- Part Three
Okay, here is a little "review key" ()= i suggest {}= it was wrong --= spelling correction They were children. I was dealing with (random "A", lol) children. I sat ...
Feb 22, 2015 -
Re: Shaping the world: scholars and ferals
Here we go! This is the only way i know how to review, sorry if you don't understand! ()= i am suggesting you change it {}= it was wrong -word-= ...
Feb 22, 2015 -
Re: Need a Title
The war started three years ago. In that period the cyborg drafts of (
Feb 18, 2015 -
Re: Deleted 52
I only have a feww suggestions. This is an awesome poem, by the way, and it flows well. There were only one or two spots that i stumbled over my ...
Dec 19, 2014 -
Re: "Heartbreak"
I'm going to go through the whole thing and point out little things that i think would be better, cause i am not that good at grammar and i have ...
Oct 8, 2014 -
Re: life
life brings gifts(, and) life brings love but brings sadness and pain it weakens you(, but all the more) strengthens you but may bring tears(,) it may bring smiles {it ...
Mar 30, 2014 -
Re: Say Something
"Silver-blue eyes firmly fixed on the floor, Sneakers tapping the floor to an unknown rhythm. I stare at the back of your head, Stomach churning and nerves strung like wire." ...
Mar 16, 2014 -
Re: Your Shadow
"A faceless twin following your every move, Grey and emotionless. Your shadow…" I don't this that the "Your Shadow" in this line fits very well, but that might just be ...
Mar 16, 2014
