Pacific_Sky14

He he, to much "it" 's. I liked it though. It's very interesting. I see behind the words. It's talking about how people gossip and it comes back around to ...

This is a poem right? So what you can do is separate the lines more because it looks like two paragraphs. :) Oh, and it doesss sound like you're talking ...

Wow, this is very awesome. No, I really did love it. It was full of emotion and a harsh sense of reality- like loveless had said. If this is a ...

CHORUS: 'cause the rain stains on your face everyone can see where you've been crying and maybe they don't know it when your lying too many excuses the ties are ...

Very creative :) Ha ha. I love the first verse. There is just the word "Dominationg" and it doesn't fit. It sounds forced. A very good tactic I use to ...

I love it! It's just the grammar. Be sure to use spelling check before posting :) And Nice job -keep writing more lyrics. Oh, and it doesn't sound like a ...

I love the second verse! It's so beautiful! There is nothing that was wrong with this. I may be wrong, but it just touched my a way. :) Cool beans, ...

You're song is great! You just need meaning :) My friend, I'm here to help! I think the lines were a bit too short. Here's a tip- Tip: Sometimes, as ...

Oh wow I love the fourth verse! That was amazing! You write very good! I don't see anything wrong with was pretty nice when I read it. It was soft ...

Wow, I think I am going to force my mom to take me to Wal-Mart to buy a box of Peeps! Those are so cute! Especially the purple ducks! I ...

She Asked: She asked: Do you love me? If only you knew: I said She asked: But why? I can't explain it: I said The second line where you're talking ...

Wow, that sounds great! Just add an "s" after the first "sing" in the second line. :) Nice job. You should continue writing this! You can PM me if you ...

I feel this tickle in my stomach Ticklish, yet soar With every growing minute It hurts my notion’s hearts core. OK, so I won't say anything about rhythm. Over all, ...

The last two sentences just popped in at me. I "was like" Whoa! You can sew the lines with the rest of the piece by mentioning Valentine's Day, in a ...

I kind of get it- It makes me wonder what came down on you. I think you did use some good is very cool:) I like your writing. It is ...