Wishing on a dream that seems far off
hopeing it will come today
into the starlight night
foolish dreamers turn their gaze
waiting on a shooting star
but what if that star is not to come
will their dreams turn to nothing
when the horizon darkens most
we all need to belive their is hope
is an angle watching closely over me
can their be a guideing light ive yet to see
I know my heat should guide me but
their is a hole within my soel
what can fill this emptyness inside of me
now all I need (despretly) is my star to come?
I love it!
It's just the grammar.
Be sure to use spelling check before posting 
And Nice job -keep writing more lyrics. Oh, and it doesn't sound like a poem, it really doesn't. I can picture someone singing it... ("Falalalalala") Ha ha
I'd like to read more of your them!
PM me if you want!
~ Pacific
It seems more like a poem than a song, to me, but it's very well written.
i liked it and i also agree with Kay Kay
can't wait to read more
very good
yeah a warning to those people... nevermind, i'll let him tell u but
very pretty and i wish i knew the tune to your boueautiful song 
I'm surprised that it wasn't about shaving or something. LOL! j/k. Um I like it but it's missing punctuation and stuff like that. Soel should be soul. In my opinion you should put the despretly in there with out the () and I think it's spelled wrong. Well good job. Can't wait to read more!
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