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Into the starlight night

by bulletproof

Wishing on a dream that seems far off
hopeing it will come today
into the starlight night
foolish dreamers turn their gaze
waiting on a shooting star
but what if that star is not to come
will their dreams turn to nothing
when the horizon darkens most
we all need to belive their is hope
is an angle watching closely over me
can their be a guideing light ive yet to see
I know my heat should guide me but
their is a hole within my soel
what can fill this emptyness inside of me
now all I need (despretly) is my star to come?

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Tue Feb 16, 2010 12:25 am
Pacific_Sky14 wrote a review...

I love it!
It's just the grammar.
Be sure to use spelling check before posting :)
And Nice job -keep writing more lyrics. Oh, and it doesn't sound like a poem, it really doesn't. I can picture someone singing it...:) ("Falalalalala") Ha ha
I'd like to read more of your them!
PM me if you want!
~ Pacific

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Sun May 29, 2005 1:41 pm
Armadian says...

Yeah it sounds like a poem. I liked it a lot.

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Sun May 29, 2005 1:20 pm
Harley says...

It seems more like a poem than a song, to me, but it's very well written.

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Thu May 26, 2005 3:18 pm
Trinity says...

i liked it and i also agree with Kay Kay
can't wait to read more
very good

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Thu May 26, 2005 3:50 am
Elizabeth says...

yeah a warning to those people... nevermind, i'll let him tell u but

very pretty and i wish i knew the tune to your boueautiful song :-D

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Wed May 25, 2005 7:41 pm
Kay Kay wrote a review...

I'm surprised that it wasn't about shaving or something. LOL! j/k. Um I like it but it's missing punctuation and stuff like that. Soel should be soul. In my opinion you should put the despretly in there with out the () and I think it's spelled wrong. Well good job. Can't wait to read more!

If I were a girl in a book, this would all be so easy.
— Jo March