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“Chad’s not up yet.” I stepped inside the small foyer and mentally gawked at the number of bags on the floor as I faced my aunt, “Oh? When will he ...

Ok, so this isn't really a prologue, it's closer to the blurb you'd find on the back of a book. A prologue is (generally) a sort undeveloped scene that will ...

Broken I thought you loved me and I loved you Bad way to start it off, I'm already bored but it was all untrue Oh dear, a boring rhyming scheme. ...

(Author’s Note: Hello. This might seem a bit random but it’ll make sense later on as I keep writing, okay? Sorry to keep you all waiting so long.) Sherman, Texas ...

Well the first thing I've noticed is that you haven't capitalized your "I's" ee cummings could get away with it because he didn't capitlize anything, nor did he punctuate or ...

This is very sad, I do like how you took something very few people payed attention to and put a little light on it. I am glad you decided to ...

In my dreams, you know who i am Capitalize your "I's" It looks better. Although when i open my eyes, we see her sitting in the corner we? Who are ...

Since most of the nitpicking was taken care of I shall not repeat any of it. I found this very funny, I was worried when I started reading the first ...

I'm new at this so please tell me the truth... Everything is black... I cant see my hand in front of my nose... All of the "..." are very distracting ...

This circle, It’s vicious, Never stopping, The fights, Caused by you, Are flowing, [s]And flowing,[/s] A punch, Then another, [s]Then another[/s], [s]Then a punch,[/s] Again and again, Never stoppin

Aww! This is so sad, there is a lot of really good things here. I can feel your emotion, and the way you described the doctor was very good. Scenes ...

Hmm, I am very sorry to say that I am really not fond of this. There is very little that is actually poetic about it, I pretty much just see ...

This is lacking in just about everything a poem should have. There is no flow, no interesting use of metophore or simile, no interesting word choice. It's all very blah. ...

I do like the sick humor here, it does have it's place in a scene like this. I like that you played it out the way that you did, and ...

Ok so the first thing I notice here is that it's very cliche. Love poems are hard to do while keeping them different from every other love poem. The main ...