Omi1

Just a suggestion. You should change your poem title to "These Four Walls", it would just sound better and less wordy that "I Didn't Mean for this to Happen". Other ...

That sounds pretty cool, I like the rhyme scheme and steady rhythm. It's short, precise, and, not overly wordy, which is a really good thing... I've read way too many ...

Wow, I think I was too tired to read all of that, but what I did read, was amazing. Thought is such an interesting process, I've never heard it explained ...

I love it! Honest. :) I especially liked the phrases "What might I become?" "What have I become" and "And wrong is made to good". I did not, however, like ...

That was pretty good but a little drawn out. I like how you tied it up so nicely at the end by repeating a similar phrase to the one stated ...

I absolutely loved your opening. It was original, well written, and captivating. Sad story, though. I really felt sorry for that soldier. He seemed so helpless and so miserable. As ...

Hey! So you started out great. It was intriguing and all, but it was short lived since you ended it so early. Not that I would add on to it, ...

Unless there was a reason to using no punctuation and or capitalization, I would recommend changing that. It seems far to casual and as for the message of the poem, ...

That was really short. If I were you, I would make it longer. It seems rather unexplained and too abrupt and short. It definitely feels unfinished and there is some ...

Ok, yeah, I have to admit that that was well written, but do you think you could write about something a little less depressing. I absolutely hate the idea that ...

I really like this, although it seems a bit vague. In a way that is good because it helps to heighten the mood, but if the title hadn't been there ...

Very interesting... I can't say that I understand it, but since it's under the genre for fantasy, I suppose it's not supposed to make much sense. Lol, funny thing is ...

This was great! I love how throughout the poem, you go on about how you don't have enough faith and how you are worried you'll never be forgiven by God ...

How come I haven't heard of this movement before? It sounds intriguing, oddly enough. That certainly was a good piece of literature, well done Deanie. I really enjoyed how as ...

It's good and it's obviously got a lot of potential. There really is not much for me to say expect that you should give it a few more stanza's. The ...