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Hi Lightsong! Now that I’ve fan girled majorly over your username - I thought I would come and check out some of your stuff. Things I liked; I liked your ...

Ah Chapter 6. And so our dalliance comes to end for a short time. Let’s get to it. Things I liked; You’ve done a great job creating tension and excitement ...

Hello there chapter 5. It’s a pleasure to meet your acquaintance. Things I liked; Oh goody gumdrops. I knew that strict teacher wasn’t going anywhere soon. The thoughts almost instantly ...

Chapter 4! I took a break last night so I could come back with a pair of fresh, well rested eyes. Things I liked; I like that your MC is ...

Chapter 3. Let’s get stuck in. Things I liked; Oh my goodness! I’m so happy that I finally know his name! I love your descriptions of objects - i.e the ...

Me again! Reviewing for you....for chapter 2.... ;) Things I liked; The dialogue immediately feels more natural between father and son already! The dynamics are being established and I can ...

Hi willachilles! You fallen warrior turned rogue! I thought I’d stop by & see how ‘Faith’ is getting on and leave a few reviews during my stay. :) Things I ...

Hi tigeraye! I see that you’re pretty new to the site. Welcome to the family :) I’m here to review your short story. Things I liked; I really like your ...

Hi ITSLEWIS. Welcome to YWS and of course, welcome to the family. I’m here to review your short story! Things I liked; Your opening paragraph. I love it. Great description ...

Hi Gray. Here to review as promised. :) Things I loved; It was kind of like cutting a cake, but sloppier. I love how your making an event which should ...

Hi TheRappa! Welcome to YWS! I hope you’re enjoying your time here so far. Carson Young stood outside the loading dock, casually watching the morning wave’s splash against the deck. ...

Hi BallisLife! Welcome to YWS! I hope you’re enjoying yourself so far. Let’s review! I’m already beyond interested with the mention of Hogwarts and unicorns! Hello my type of story! ...

Hi Waddlers! I was trawling through the literary sections and spotted the world prologue! I’m all yours. Your first paragraph is very good. Short, snappy and straight to the point ...

Hello again, MuscialTheaterGirl17. I’m back! That short, sharp sentence at the start of this chapter is perfection. That is exactly what I meant by creating more tension and excitement. Throw ...

Hello MuscialTheaterGirl17. I was trawling through the fantasy section and came across your chapters! I will review them for this fine review day. 
I adore your first sentence! It actually ...