Octave

This is very bland. oo" The concept and the premise should evoke powerful emotions, and if this is what I think it is (a delusional man breaking down), then it's ...

After reading this piece, I'm afraid I'm going to have to disagree with the others. >.O" However, I do believe this deserves to be on the front page, among the ...

Comments and corrections in red. Maryann was walking to the near by Shop Mart, deciding whether or not she should get a new vacuum cleaner. Time and time again I ...

(Read the author's note first please) Hello everyone! I'm new here, so please be patient with me. Here is the story I've been working on for a while. I already ...

Comments in red. Come, sit,' he said, a hint of order in his voice. I think 'he ordered' would be better than 'he said'. This isn't to say that said ...

Finally here. ^^" Comments and corrections in red. Click here to join the fan page for Into the Depths. Summary of Chapter 1 Madeleine Grey is a seventeen year old ...

Hey Eli! You know the drill. 8] Click here to join the fan page for Into the Depths. This chapter is the first installment in my completed NaNo novel, the ...

Hey there Retro! I'm going to be your reviewer for tooday. :3 Corrections and comments in red. "Daddy! Daddy , come here" Chloe said. She was dressed in her white ...

AN: Hi guys! So, this is a rewrite of I'm Coming Home for Christmas , a short story I posted on the site a while ago. A lot of people ...

Comments and corrections in red, Isha. Alright, so. I like JUST wrote this. I sort of just started writing, and then I suddenly couldn't stop.... and well, this happened. It ...

Comments and corrections in red, AM. :3 Breathe… What's with the ellipsis? Purple, Not quite sure if it should be a comma. that's the colour I see every time Samantha ...

Hey! ^^ Jae here to review your work. Comments and corrections will be in red. Hello there! This is a potential preface to a novel I'm working on. It's a ...

Annie Ryan’s limp body was there, surrounded by roses, for all to see. I think you could do better, but this isn't a bad start. Try changing it to active ...

Comments and corrections in red. This is so not ready and will probably be taken down again after Reviewing Sunday, but hey, might as well get some opinions! I know ...

Each day after school, you used to sit on the pier overlooking the bay, your tanned skin gleaming under only a bikini and a thin layer of sunscreen. The last ...