NovaRose

Ha ha! You totally pulled me in with the title. Clever. I like how you tied in the idea from this hymn into a science-fiction style of story. Some quick ...

Wow, that was awesome; I especially liked how you showed Zeke and Seira's connection as friends more than just allies. The only two things that bothered me were first, you ...

I considered making a refugee-style forum for all of us homeless YWSers, but decided it just wouldn't ever be the same as it is now. I just hope that we ...

I used to love Roald Dahl. I didn't read this book you're talking about, but I read Matilda, The Witches, Charlie and the Chocolate Factory, The Glass Elevator, The Twits, ...

The point is that we don't understand God. Sometimes taking back the life he gave to us is actually the most merciful thing He can do. Of course, that all ...

Well, Misty, from all that I've read of yours, I can definitely say that probably your strongest point is being able to draw people into the story--create mystery and such ...

I couldn't help but feel completely devoid of emotion when I read this. Not only does it fail to express the character's emotions, but it takes away any natural emotional ...

Wow, I didn't know people learned swear words so young. Also-wow, I didn't know people could write with correct spelling, punctuation and grammar that young. No, wait, I'm pretty sure ...

I half expected Conrad to say, "I hate blondes too..." Creepy! This is such a sad story, but it's so intriguing, you must post more! Or you can send it ...

Wow, that was awesome. You have a very interesting title--that's what made me want to read this story. I hope that there are very few, if any, parents like that. ...

LOL, nice. Good rhyming and what, although "Here's a story I will tell" sounded like a forced rhyme, and is pretty cliche IMO. Also, you need to pay attention to ...

Heh, excellent point, Liz. As for the poeticness of the poem--not too much of it. You rhymed well in the first stanza, then just sort of quit using any sort ...

Two words: AWE SOME. Okay, so that's really one word, but I wrote it as two words, although the meaning is changed when the words are separated. I'm just going ...

I would suggest putting the three parts in seperate threads, actually, so people can comment on a part of it instead of feeling like they have to read the whole ...

I like this. I noticed that you threw in at least one line from a real song, though; isn't that plagiarism? Anyway, I like how you kind of mixed deeper ...