Noelle

Hi there! My corrections/comments are all in red: What happens when the Princesses don’t need the Knights?

Hi there! I think you did a really good job with this. It flows really well and can be easily set to a tune. Your rhyming is good as well, ...

Hi there! All my comments and such are in red: The ground nearly shakes, Full of a crowd's anticipation, Bursting, rippling, repelling out, Ready for their son to come home. ...

Hi there! This is a great poem. I really enjoyed reading it! The rhyming is good although 'pity' and 'me' don't really rhyme, but it still works. I couldn't find ...

Hi there! This poem is really good. I haven't read many short poems, but yours is great! You packed a lot of punch into those three lines. This poem flows ...

Hi there! So I see everyone else already commented on the grammer and spelling errors, so I'm going to say what I like about this piece. My comments are in ...

Hi there! I love this poem. I feel the same way. I would much rather sit in the grass under a tree. This poem flows very well and has great ...

Hi there! I was very excited to see you had posted the second chapter of this! I read the prolouge/chapter 1 and I was really looking forward to reading more ...

Hi there! This is a really good poem. It flows well and there aren't any grammer or spelling errors that I found. You did a great job describing the point ...

Hi there! This is a good piece. I can relate to this because I babysit and I feel this way about the kids I look after. You put a lot ...

Hi there! I really enjoyed this poem. It flows really well and sticks to the point you're trying to get across. There's great illiteration and rhyme. I don't have any ...

Hi there! I quite enjoyed this piece. I like how it jumps right to the action. You did a great job describing the scene your character is seeing. I could ...

Hi there! This made me laugh in several different spots. I loved it! When I first read the description I was thinking, 'stream of conciousness, really?' I had to read ...

Hi there! This is a great start. Your characters are real and I find myself relating to them. This made me think back on a school day in December when ...

Hi there! Welcome to YWS! First off I'd like to say that this poem definitely has potential. Not that it's bad, but I think you could've added more to it. ...