Published August 18, 2011
I walk it. I talk it. I even look it. This silly apron is nice…does it make my backside look big? Anyway, cleaning, cooking, and trying to discipline the kids. These things never seem to work. I’m just not scary enough. Why don’t they just love me enough to obey me? Why must I always say those words, “Just you wait until your mother gets home!”
Points:
Time spent:
IP address:
Canary word: Present
Possible AI signals:
Original Text:
Are you sure you want to delete this comment? This cannot be undone.
Mark this comment as a review? Points will be awarded to the poster.
Your comment was posted, but it wasn’t long enough to count as a review. Reviews need about four complete sentences (at least 250 characters). Try writing another review that explains your thoughts in more detail — the author will appreciate it, and you’ll earn points for it.
138,393 Literary Works • 672,114 Reviews
To answer the question about the size of the piece, the contest asked for the work to be 150 words or less. I opted for the "or less." I figured that short and sweet would be the best approach to keep the vague part of the writing until the punch line.
Hi there!
This is a good piece. I can relate to this because I babysit and I feel this way about the kids I look after. You put a lot of emotion into this piece. You packed a lot of emotion and meaning into a little bit of words.
Overall good job with this. Keep writing!
Hahaha I found the last part hilarious!
Man do i know how that feels! -__- 
But why was it so short?? I didnt quite get the goal you were trying to pass out her. :/
Either way, nice piece! Keep up the good work!
Overall It was a good piece, but there were a few flaws. I loved how I could relate to exactly what you were saying, most of the time. I feel as if you could have put more emotion into it.