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Re: Immortal
Hi there! All right, my comments are in red below. My perennial silhouette blackens my dark cold heart, cools my icy flesh, steals all my warmth, my grace it takes, ...
Aug 28, 2011 -
Re: Lets Invade...(insert country here)
Hi there! Yes the captain of this ship holds wears a wetsuit made from fear. I just wanted to start off this review by saying I really like this line! ...
Aug 28, 2011 -
Re: You are beautiful
Hi there! All right, my comments are in red below. Staring in the mirror disgust ed with what you see No perfect model just the normal you and me So, ...
Aug 28, 2011 -
Re: The World Is My Playground
Hi there! All right, my comments are in red below. The world is my playground For me to learn new things I totally agree with these first two lines. And ...
Aug 28, 2011 -
Re: Loose Change
Hi there! All right, a poem written entirely as a metaphor, can't wait to read it! My comments are in red below. He is the lonely stranger that travels everywhere. ...
Aug 28, 2011 -
Re: Spilt Milk
Hi there! Alright, my comments are in red below: I don’t cry over spilt spilled milk, It's supposed to be spilled milk, right? It’s just not my style, Because I ...
Aug 28, 2011 -
Re: Forever with me
When the lights go out And I'm stranded alone I'll think of you to comfort my fear And drive away my anxiety. This poem starts out really sweet. I hope ...
Aug 28, 2011 -
Re: darker times
Hi there! My comments are in red below. When she's just talking to me And it feels like she's SCREAMING IN MY EAR I get the fact that you want ...
Aug 28, 2011 -
Re: Untitled Optimist Poem
Hi there! My comments are in red below. Love for sake of love? Perhaps. Do not look upon my sad and miserable heart I like the emotion put into these ...
Aug 28, 2011 -
Re: Dear Hanna
Hi there! Wow...that's all I can say right now. I'm such in awe by how good this story is. Here I thought that the main character was going to go ...
Aug 28, 2011 -
Re: Tiggy the Piggy
Hi there! Oh my gosh, this is such a cute story! I mean that in a good way of course. It kind of reminded me of when I was young ...
Aug 28, 2011 -
Re: The Publisher
Hi there! A fellow Team Watchmen here to review! :) I had always loved to learn. I feel like you don't need the word 'had' here. It sounds like your ...
Aug 28, 2011 -
Re: A saw a Poem
Hi there! I really don't have much to say about this, but my comments are in red below: I saw a poem today. Can you really only see a poem? ...
Aug 28, 2011 -
Re: A Single Second Chance
Light screams from your eyes, I can tell that you're trying to add some imagery here, but I don't think 'screams' is the right word to use. Maybe you could ...
Aug 28, 2011 -
Re: Thrown Overboard (not final title)
Hi there! This is a great poem. I can feel the motion you put into this. Good job! You also did a greatsjob with your imagery. You have a good ...
Aug 28, 2011