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Re: The Alchemist's Bookshop [Part 2]
Hello! I can't believe how smoothly this flows! I got sucked into your voice just like last time and it's not common for me to read something that's such a ...
May 16, 2018 -
Re: The Alchemist's Bookshop [Part 1]
Evan!! This was so beautiful oh my gosh! First of all, I fell in love with your characters so easily. Your voice sets up such a fairytale atmosphere. I felt ...
May 12, 2018 -
Re: Hearts Of Stone
Hello! Wow, this is incredibly short. Are you meaning for this to be in the novel or the synopsis on the back of the novel? I'm thinking it's meant to ...
Apr 15, 2018 -
Re: Creatures Of The Night - Chapter 2-Seek
Hello again! I noticed that you switched pov's there in the beginning, and it was a bit jarring at first. Don't worry, I do that a lot in my writing. ...
Apr 15, 2018 -
Re: Creatures Of The Night - Chapter 1-Invade
Hello! Already this is reminding me of Twilight and Beautiful Creatures. Not assuming that this is about vampire or... whatever Beautiful Creatures was about, but because of the move to ...
Apr 15, 2018 -
Re: Ballerinas Out of the Wings
Hello! I am here as requested! I feel like you were trying to articulate a very specific point here. From what I understand, this is a study on communication and ...
Apr 10, 2018 -
Re: "Danser" Pt. 4
Hello! I finally have time to get to this! Ah, so not dead! Just incapacitated. Lovely. Okay, I'm still not quite sure about the nature of the attack. I know ...
Apr 8, 2018 -
Re: Ghost Man (4/4)
Well, here we are. I don't know what to say. I said I didn't know where this was going, but I didn't expect it to end so bittersweet. Honestly, towards ...
Apr 4, 2018 -
Re: Ghost Man (3/4)
Hello again! So we're reaching the end of this short story. I honestly thought this was going to be longer - I still need to work on paying more attention ...
Apr 3, 2018 -
Re: Nameless Book Chapter 1: Pages 1-2
Hello and welcome to YWS! Wow, I honestly really loved this! I like how Cam is talking directly to the reader. Sometimes that can be hard to pull off if ...
Apr 1, 2018 -
Re: The Towers of Unknown
Hello! A lot of this felt like I was talking to my therapist. It's honestly pretty creepy because in our last session we were talking about love and expectations. I ...
Apr 1, 2018 -
Re: Glasses 1A
Hello again! I liked how we got a little glimpse into Axel's daily life here. You also added in more world-building which was nice. I especially liked the part about ...
Apr 1, 2018 -
Re: Ghost Man (2/4)
Hello again! Whoops. Looks like you doubled up your intro paragraph there. I'm really feeling for Monty right now. I mean, as an actor, your face is your most valuable ...
Apr 1, 2018 -
Re: Glowpeak Academy- Chapter Two
Hello again! In light of this chapter two, I can't help thinking that chapter one should have been a prologue. But, that's strictly opinion. I actually really liked this chapter! ...
Apr 1, 2018 -
Re: Glowpeak Academy- Chapter Two
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Apr 1, 2018
Hello again! In light of this chapter two, I can't help thinking that chapter one should have been a prologue. But, that's strictly opinion. I actually really liked this chapter! ...
