Niraco

I'm unsure as to which couplet you're talking about. I can't rhyme so if I did then it was by pure accident.

I went back and changed regarding your suggestions. Also, I always put up work to get reviews xD

The fact that you didn't preach makes the poem all that more great :D

I never really noticed I used dialogue a lot. Thanks for pointing it out. :D

I know I use the word 'I' and awful amount. (Just used it three times there) Thank you for the review, it means a lot to me :D

Cheers for the review Deadman. I wanted the poem to be longer - which is why I think I have mixed feelings for it - but I just couldn't get ...

Thanks for the review. I see what you mean and when I can I'll go back and work on the pacing. :)

Thanks an awful lot with your review. The things you pointed out I almost always mess up on. I can never seem to really grasp the technicals of writing so ...

Thank you for the review. Makes me feel a lot better about writing poetry.

Thank you for the review, means a lot.

I really did not expect such a good review. Thanks for that :)

That is the first time I've noticed it. Oops.

Wow I didn't know that this was written so long ago.

Indeed a battle is the best way to describe suffering from mental illness. I wish you the best.

Like I said your style of writing is great and you seem to have a firm grasp on writing techniques. It's just the plot which I didn't like. Which is ...