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Wow, jack that's great :) It almost makes me think of what is going on with IS at the moment. It makes me feel really sad (which means it is ...

Hey Firelight :) Wow, great story. I love, love, love historical fiction. And this is almost perfect. Although the start confused me a bit. You start by saying where she ...

Hey 90skids Wow, nice chapter. Love the strong sense of mystery. It's so exciting. I have been following your story and I have to say I like that you changed ...

Alright, so this was great. I think that this is probably your best chapter yet. But there were a few things that court my attention. In your first paragraph, "...hiding ...

WHAT?! NO! HE CANNOT JUST SURRENDER!!! Oh, whoops, got a little carried away :) Time to review. Okay. *exhales* Other then some grammar mistakes it was AWESOME!! Although I do ...

Hey MissMikerowave, Welcome to the Young Writers Society. Alright to start with, if this is really your first story, WOW! My first story was literally RUBBISH! Okay, so things you've ...

Hey there, So.... I really like the sound of this story. It is the type of story you could make really funny yet serious. Cannot wait to see where this ...

I found this argument to be despicable. It was so thin that the smallest breath of TRUTH could shatter it. All that you have done with this 'manifesto' is MAKE ...

Okay, so you need to work on your grammar. There were quite a few things that needed capitalizing. I would recommend going through and editing your story before posting it. ...

Hey Jack This, I thought, was great. Other than a few grammar mistakes it was awesome. There were just some commas where they shouldn't be and others not where they ...

Hey, review time. Okay, what just happened? I really do not know. One minute he is walking to work and the next Australia is being invaded by America. Everything in ...

Wow, I really liked this. It is like a sweet little memento to a very special plant. I think it is cool how you make it sound so much more ...

Hey, Nikki here to review  Okay, so I read you first part as well and I have to say I really liked them both. I love that you have ...

Hey, Okay, so I keep wondering where you are going with this. Is it going to be about your typical perfect popular girl who can do no wrong or what? ...

Hey, I like the sound of this story idea but there were a few things that you need to work on. 1) I think it would be more exciting and ...