Muse

ooh, i like this one better than your other one. It flows much better, and the theme is much clearer. Yeah...s'good. Nice one.

The rhythm is a bit off in places, but apart from that its good. Would be cool to hear the audio.

S'mad.

I prefer the second one. It flows really well, which really suits what the poem is about..Yup, certainly very well written. Good work.

hahahah *wheezes* whahahaa. That's ace! I luff it! s'funny.

it's...uhm....beautiful?

ahahaaahaa. hawhwehahheheehehahhahe *wheezes* hawhehahehahahehahwhahwhhawhehaw. anyhoo, i luffed it all. S'funny. It is quite like Douglas Adams' work, which is a good thing..cause he's ace!

wow, it flows really well. Nice one!

i loved that book!! I cried....

Short but sweet..I like it a lot. I like the contrast between the first and last line as at first you are greeted with a powerful, almost depressing image, but ...

no, i think its just right. I dont really have much to say, apart from it was a great piece of work. well done!

yes, i especially liked the ending. The whole thing flows really nicely...yummy. Great work, yet again!

i want nothing more than stars above my head and grass between my toes. i want to feel the ocean lead to sand lead to concrete lead to you. Very ...

Beautiful.. "...You made me remember what my knees are for. You made me believe in myself and you make me feel in colors and breathe in tastes you make me ...

Wheee, i like. Yes, Music is....revenge. To write a swansong that need not be your last is a venture to take. Is especially nice. Smashin stuff.