Published July 25, 2005
My trigger finger is set.
I’ve got it aimed at your head.
One pull, and I can finally begin to forget.
I swear to you it wont hurt.
I promise that it will work.
Blow you away, into the past, where you will fade into black.
Misfire!
I can see right inside you. The bullets are gone. Misfire!
Misfire!
I used to be ahead of the rest, now I’m a thousand bullets back! Misfire!
Misfire!
It only takes one shot.
To know if you’ve won or not.
It only takes one kill.
To know for sure it was real.
I hope you see me laughing as your eyes fill with blood.
Your heart pumping will cease, you’ll be defeated like me.
Misfire!
You finally stop breathing. The bullets are gone. Misfire!
Misfire!
I used to lead the pack, now I’m a thousand bullets back! Misfire
Misfire!
Thumb. Hammer. Hairline trigger.
I hope you go in peace.
Instead of pieces like me.
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nice try though u have ot be more realistic some of the parts didnt make sense at all and some parts were ver very very sarcastic so next time when u make a song think bout people giving you comments plzz seee ya
It's different, which is what the music scene needs right now. I love the last three lines; rock on. Hopefully you can get a microphone or something, tape your band and let us hear 'em.
The rhythm is a bit off in places, but apart from that its good. Would be cool to hear the audio.
Fund raiser and public stuff, yeah know. The sum of the parts should be worse than the whole.
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It supposed to be like redemption and revenge and a whole lot of bitter feelings morphed together and filtered into somethign relatively cheery.
Sorry I haven't the audio. 'fraid me and the boys havent got such funds.
This sounds like something BULLETPROOF wrote (Ironically enough)
But, seriously, it's a concern...
I don't know, what is up with this depression theme? It is so when i was into it
Although I have to admit I did like it... As well as many other suicidal/gothic/weirdwadded things there are.
I can't really imagine this as a song... It's a bit too sarcastic, I guess, for songs... The 'misfire!' repetition kind of made the song seem jolly, even though it's supposed to be the opposite.